Good? Bad?
If bad... help me fix them please. I also need a title.
-Unconcerning colors collide upon my canvas
-Captured within chapters, surrendered into stanzas
-With complete abandonment we throw caution to the wind
-Set upon by uncoiled memories as thoughts slowly transcend
-Scattered shadows on the ground
-Black rose pedals falling down
-We grasp at light without design
-The sparks of darkness they do confine
-Our souls are rattled like a silver chain
-Untill only memories of our dust remain
-We are blown away by the winds of time
-Our lives eroded like water wears through stones of lime.
-Unconcerning colors collide upon my canvas
-Captured within chapters, surrendered into stanzas
-With complete abandonment we throw caution to the wind
-Set upon by uncoiled memories as thoughts slowly transcend
-As characters we play our role
-As caricatures we bare our soul
-Concealed dimensions released before our eyes
-We forfeit and surrender desires in disguise
If bad... help me fix them please. I also need a title.
-Unconcerning colors collide upon my canvas
-Captured within chapters, surrendered into stanzas
-With complete abandonment we throw caution to the wind
-Set upon by uncoiled memories as thoughts slowly transcend
-Scattered shadows on the ground
-Black rose pedals falling down
-We grasp at light without design
-The sparks of darkness they do confine
-Our souls are rattled like a silver chain
-Untill only memories of our dust remain
-We are blown away by the winds of time
-Our lives eroded like water wears through stones of lime.
-Unconcerning colors collide upon my canvas
-Captured within chapters, surrendered into stanzas
-With complete abandonment we throw caution to the wind
-Set upon by uncoiled memories as thoughts slowly transcend
-As characters we play our role
-As caricatures we bare our soul
-Concealed dimensions released before our eyes
-We forfeit and surrender desires in disguise