I feel like that reverse cymbal or whatever at :17 is gonna lead into the part at :30. The build up you make with that reversed cymbal is immediately killed with what follows it.
Other than that, solid mix. I just think it's a bit too Sturgis sounding.
Really dig it! Very powerful. If I may suggest one thing, low pass the vocals a little bit. Maybe around 12-15k. They just have that high bite, but that might be what you're going for. Nice job though!