Musically, it's pretty good. I can get the idea of the overall mix you're wanting to go for and I like the continual lead line of the guitar, which is subdued but plenty apparent. The lyrics are a bit too obvious as to the song's intent and I'm, personally, not a big fan of that aproach... but I'm an instrumentalist so what do I know from writing lyrics:Spin:. Nice growling vox at the end, though. Good tone there but you may want to take a little of the crispness off of them by dropping the higher end eq down a bit and maybe running the track through something like the AIPL Warmtone or some other tube/tape simulator.
I'm interested in hearing the final mix on this one.