I'm not really into the genre so I'm not gonna comment on the song itself. However, I think there's something wrong with the bass... Guitars and drums sound fine to me. Voice is a little too low in the mix. And bass seems to be fartin' all over the place. I'd tighten it and turn it down. Are you using a bass amp recording? If you are, I'd try using a bass D.I. + other stuff (compression, maybe Ampeg SVX, etc).
