Final Fantasy Jesus

i just finished the lyrics. theyre alright for a 15 year old writing lyrics based off of something like this...

Veni, Vidi, Vici

Since the genesis of the world
I have yearned to seize all power
From the vast lands of the kings
To the guarded gates of eternity
I will be one ruler of all

I came
I saw
I conquered

I came
I saw
I conquered

Arson attacks upon every empire created
I feel stronger than ever
From the vast lands of the kings
To the guarded gates of eternity
I will be on ruler of all

I came
I saw
I conquered

I came
I saw
I conquered
....
I conquered
(solo)
Here I stand
With my once desired power
From the vast lands of the kings
To the guarded gates of eternity
I am ruler of all.

I came
I saw
I conquered
(4)
 
It' good in my opinion, Keeping your age in mind.

But my whistle would be much more wet if it was historically accurate.
thanks.

yeah if it was historically i wouldve taken a lot more time on it. this is something i wrote within maybe 10-15 minutes. the meaning of the song is right there in front of you. obviously fictional, but its about a man (from a first person view) who wants all the power that has ever been created in the universe.
 
ryan, the lyrics are ok, the only thing i don't like is the mention of kings, which reminds me of powermetal, which sucks, thus I hope the riffs will be brutal and the solo shreddy and dark, not a power metal solo that sounds like a cat mewing after you stepped on its tail.

a better song with a tittle in latin would be:
In Vino Veritas:kickass:
 
Its scientific fact that 99.99% of power metal sucks and actually makes your genitalia shrink. Some hypothesize that nonstop continuous listening to power metal will actually make your genetalia shrink so much that they turn inward, turning into a vagina.