The bass drum click is a little shrill, but that could be my speakers. Vocals are a bit too loud, and the distorted bass is occupying some of the same frequencies as the guitar. I find that it helps to restrict the overdriven bass track (assuming you're doing the bass as multiple tracks) to the low mids, since you should be carving the guitar out of that region anyway. Really great arrangement though, and you did a fantastic faux-Jens! Far better than my own attempts as well hahah. Excellent job sir.