I need Opinions Please!!!

sounds mushy and confused

there's no groove which this kind of track needs - the guitars and drums seem to be from different songs at the beginning

the cymbal that rings throughout is horrible. sounds like heavy hari krishnacore ;)

the guitars lack focus and a probably panned too wide - try mixing in mono and get the levels balanced

i think that there is certainly an idea for a track there - try cutting down on the number of tracks playing at once

good luck!