Suicide Brain and Beyond the SUN

[PlatypusJesus]

"Suicide Brain"

Tormented
Destrought
Sickening Thoughts
My mind, insane
Oh the pain
I'll take the gun
And kill my brain

(chorus)
Suicide
I'll leave this life behind
Six Feet Under I shall lay
With this gun
My life I take away

Who's to say I'm the only one
Everybody has this day
When they feel this way
Myself
I disdain
My life
I will claim

Chorus

What's beyond here
I don't care
My soul I would sell
To get out of this hell
The bells
They toll
I'll take the gun
And in my head
Make the hole

Chorus

With the trigger
Pulled halfway
I see light rays
Images from yesterday
I hear the click
It is gone so quick
What have I done
My life is gone

Suicide
I left this life behind
Six feet under
In my grave I lay
With the gun
My life I took away
My soul now rests
Beyond the SUN

"Beyond the SUN"

My soul
Rests in free space
Planets fly by
Did I die?

Still my soul floats
Beyond the SUN
My life taken
By the GUN
Forever will I be?
Floating here
In Eternity

Beyond the SUN
I roam
Is this my home?
Is there an end
And after that more
I don't know
Is this the norm
Up ahead
A strange black form

Still my soul floats
Beyond the SUN
My life taken
By the GUN
I feel
The End is here
The Black Hole is near

I can't get away
It's force is too strong
Inside I see souls
Singing a sorrowful song
Suicide
Traps them here
Their souls seared
Into the void
I'm forced
I can't change course

Now my soul is pulled
Into the Suicide Hole
Here
Suffers soiled souls
The end is here
The void
Is oh so near

The hole is vile
It spews bile
In this void
Life is no more
Souls wail
In its core
And I now
Join in
On their songs
Of SIN

Now my soul is stuck
In the Suicide Hole
Here
Suffers soiled souls
All life is gone
Let the void
Let it be known

What do you think? Do they suck as much as I think they do?

 

[PlatypusJesus]

I don't know about you but I voted amazing. Well, they are my crappy lyrics.

 

[Will Bozarth]

that was the closest one you had to "they're alright"

 

[RETIREDTrapped]

Tormented
Destrought
Sickening Thoughts
My mind, insane
Oh the pain
I'll take the gun
And kill my brain

Ha ha... that's a riot.

 

[PlatypusJesus]

Well, you see DSM, I know that everyone on here thinks that I suck, so I figure everyone will vote "ok, but you suck" instead of "Suck Hell".

 

[PlatypusJesus]

You see the reason I wrote Suicide Brain was because my friend was trying to write lyrics about suicide and seeing how far somebody's brains could fly so I thought I would write my own version of the lyrics. After I wrote it I just decided to write Beyond the SUN, I don't know why, I just didn't have anything else to do I guess.

 

[PlatypusJesus]

Look it's a tie....come on sucking he,er....I mean amazing.

 

[PlatypusJesus]

Damn, I didn't think they sucked that bad. Better throw these away before they get out, oh damn, I posted them on a message board. Damn it to hell.