So I was singing along to this and was let down that the best part (the end) was left out.
Anyways, that snare sounds pretty painful in the beginning throughout that roll. Look into humanizing the track a little bit to get a more realistic feel. That's the main thing that stands out to me. As well as the 2-bar guitar fill before the 1st verse, sounds way too dark. If I didn't already know the song, I would probably have a hard time figuring out what's going on there. I would say go ahead and get rid of whatever EQ curve you have for that part and just let it ride. Maybe HP it a bit if you want to get closer to the original track.