Critique my new metal track. First time vocals.

[colinmacisaac0]

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/5320442/April 5, 2010. Master. .mp3

What do you guys think? Be honest.

 

[Deltones]

The mix is pretty messy. You have some interesting ideas, like at the start of 1:10, but the lack of clarity brings the ideas down. If you could work on clarifying your mix so that your parts are more distinct, then the track would breathe better.