critique this ad

[avi]

that jake and I are splitting:
http://www.roig-stockwell.com/iw/amp_ad_nov.jpg
(too big to post in thread)

actual size: 3.75x5"

jake wants me to switch out sword of exactly with some other bigger draw name, but otherwise I think I'm ready to run with it.

thoughts?

 

[xfer]

i like it but did you have to curse! shame shame.

 

[minxnim]

it's good

 

[avi]

I didn't curse - I'm just quoting.

any spacing things that could be done better? ideas about moving graphics around?

 

[minxnim]

personally i think the top graphic would look better centered but i am a loser so what do i know?

 

[lizard]

the only thing I would change is the indieworkshop script running horizonally and maybe the hand graphic on the left hand side of the page up and down, to offset the itsatrap graphic on the right.
but that's nitpicking.

 

[azal]

please add this to jake's half.

"put me down for one of these, biotch." - xfer from the internet.

 

[xfer]

hey, i dunno if i want my internet good name and fame being traded on to shill CDs@!!

 

[deadair]

...damn alex

 

[kleo706]

Dude, a review from Steven Segal would fucking help me choose!

 

[goatschool]

i think the leading (vertical spacing) could be better, but maybe jake's section is okay on that.

i would definitely give more space for the inset of all the type. too close to the border.

both headlines could be a bit bolder? jake's, moreso in this case. competes with the large type.

it's needs to be it´s, same with reader´s

otherwise nice.

 

[inkybmistro]

there are a few kerning issues ("it's" and "reader's" stand out, esp. that ' in reader's) and the vertical spacing between that top block and the aversionline quote looks a little bit close and maybe the quoted text could be smaller. other than that i think maybe try experimenting with aligninment? see how some blocks of text look pushed right and whatnot. who knows.

anyway, who made that indieworkshop graphic? i like it.

 

[deadair]

a friend of mine did the layout for the comp.

you can check out some of his other stuff here - www.neonclear.com/
but i don't think he has updated his site for a while. he has been very busy at Hydra Head, where he is in charge of promotion and design (well, on some things)

 

[avi]

stupid apostrophes

 

[avi]

revised version now up.

better?
(I'll fix the borders, but they aren't what really matters)

 

[goatschool]

yeah, absolutely.

one more thingee: quotes look like they are inch marks?

 

[inkybmistro]

you might want to manually adjust the kerning on those apostrophes to set them apart from the preceding letter.

 

[avi]

remember, this thing is only gonna be 3.75x5". I don't think those quotes will be big enough for anyone to nitpick over.
(and I'm lazy, dammit).