Hard rock/alternative metal song "Witch" (original) critics please!

[MoTang]

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/6010620/Witch with RFR 2.mp3

I'm not so sure if I am completely proud of how this turned out, mostly because I am maybe not the greatest fan of how the vocals were sung. I don't know, maybe I should have pumped him up a bit before he sang? The delivery doesn't fit. Like he has no rasp in his voice which would seem to be better here. I was kind of going for a Linkin Park kind of feel.

When comparing to other mixes in this genre, it is all right, but I know that I can improve the low end. Also, the vocals. I don't know..they seem to sit all right, but man that tone and he's pitchy at parts (yes I autotuned the vocals, line by line but it seemed to not help at some parts)

Also, I realize there is some background hiss in some of the vocals and that's because I didn't think and used the singers own cable which was an XLR to 1/4 inch cable. My audio interface produces less preamp gain when using 1/4 connection instead of XLR to XLR so I got a lot of preamp noise (due to me cranking the preamp) on some of the takes before I got the proper cable, and he didn't want to re do them.

He was happy with the final result, but meh...I don't know. I need some fresh ears to help me out.

Thanks.

 

[diseasedbeing]

The music is good. I like the song writing as well, but yes, get a new vocalist. He has no drive and horridly out of pitch. His voice doesnt fit the music. Dont waste good song writing on that

 

[MoTang]

The music is good. I like the song writing as well, but yes, get a new vocalist. He has no drive and horridly out of pitch. His voice doesnt fit the music. Dont waste good song writing on that

Thanks for the input.

I guess I should have noted that I'm not in a band or anything. He just approached me wanting to record a song. He initially wrote it but it was really barebones with a simple three chord structure. I basically helped him out and wrote the song using the chord structure.

Mix wise do you have any input?

Any more opinions from other people?

 

[MoTang]

Well I updated the mix if anyone cares from other critiques on other boards. Yes the vocals still aren't the greatest but I am focusing more on the mix itself. When hearing other mixes on the genre I feel that my kick bass relationship isn't good. Any other critiques?

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/6010620/Witch with RFR 4.mp3