Help my with this mix!

[hidemerre]

Hey, can someone help me with this mix?

Drums are real with kick and snare replaced...

I would like to know your opinion on the mix and what could I improve on this mix.

Thankx!

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1990692/tema 9 v.2.mp3

I have made some changes in this version.

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1990692/tema 9 v.3.mp3

 

[hidemerre]

No replies? It sounds so wrong?