i need your advice! tell me if this track is lacking.

[jesterroot4]

i haven't mixed it yet. and its the first time my band has wrote a whole track with the aid of a computer as we write. ignore the tones and the clipping etc, its purely a guide for when we record it.

could you listen to the whole thing and tell me what it needs?

http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/23695_newesttrackbiatchbeefiermaster.mp3

cheers!!!!
all comments will be very much appreciated!

 

[jesterroot4]

in this, we've only gone for the basic structure, we can add more fiddly bits as the rest of the band hear it, but as for the structure and riffs, what do you think?

 

[jesterroot4]

nuthin? ok