Inspired Snippet (TSE/new Slate kit/etc/help i need crits plz)

[fenders]

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2255790/July 25 song part.mp3
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I need crits on everything, i love the kick sound, not sure about the snare though. Anyone have suggestions to better the mix? i feel like the bass could fill in the sound better, but im not quite sure on how to do this. thoughts?

btw riffs are in no way final. just got inspired today and wrote it all out

 

[XnaySaturo]

I actually like everything the way it is! There's some guitars abruptly cutting off, but that's it. Sounds really good!

 

[jamesgillespie1]

i think the drums sound fine. i would definitely use a larger crash cymbal for the left crash though. it sounds paper thin.

 

[fenders]

Thanks guys! The guitars are cut off like that because I wasn't sure how long I was going to hold them out at the time, of course these are very basic ideas lol. Any other comments or suggestions?

 

[fenders]

here is the finished song, writting wise that is
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2255790/July 29 song full.mp3

Ther are still some things left to do mixing wise but im done with it for tonight. Any more suggestions and also what do you think of the songwriting? Thanks guys!

 

[Josh M.]

here is the finished song, writting wise that is
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2255790/July 29 song full.mp3

Ther are still some things left to do mixing wise but im done with it for tonight. Any more suggestions and also what do you think of the songwriting? Thanks guys!

Off beat drum hits at the start with the cleans (cymbals) are kind of off putting and do not work well, I would rewrite that part.

I like the sound though and the rest of the composition is really cool.

 

[cloy26]

drums are a hair too loud and dominating... Bring 'em down like 1 db and you'll be golden. Sounds pretty cool.