Lyrics for a song what i have made

[juoppo]

Left and fucked up
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i'm so lost,lost inside
left,unleashed like hell


Left i'm,again and again

So left feeling inside of me
so lose my way like fucking hell
so killing myself for suffering
so i feel so left,fucked up inside
will you ever get same feeling than
me...
me...
me...

fuck you mothefucker,do you ever feel how to left feel
i think you're not,mothefucker

i'm so lost,lost inside
left,unleashed like hell,like hell
Left,fucked up
So!
so!
killing you by the suffering
so!
so!
mothefucker,go where ever you come from,we don't need you
you boring fuck
go where ever you want to,i don't give a fuck,but now on you're nothing but a

So left feeling inside of me
so lose my way like fucking hell
so killing myself for suffering
so i feel so left,fucked up inside
will you ever get same feeling than
me...
me...
me...
(killing you by the suffering)
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there it is,say here what you guys like about it =)

 

[stoned&drunk]

 

[CRrEiTsIRED]

I'm not really into the "fuck you" kind of poetry.

 

[Johanna]

No offence, but.... this has to be a joke, right?

 

[egonomic666]

yea dude im more down with saying fuck you in a more poetic way if that makes any sense at all

 

[lakebodom_666]

here dude i think yah forgot to say fuck

 

[Abrasive-X]

what the fuck!

FUCK YOUR SONG? :[
dude it doesnt make sense

 

[delt]

and the "killing you by suffering" is taken directly from angel of death.

lyrics are shit without a song anyways.

 

[Bahomet]

I really hope you didn't work too hard on those.

 

[dargormudshark]

yeah, the cursing was kind of overdone, I can't see where their was alot of work went into it. I don't mean it to be offensive. All I know is that I put alot of thought into my bands lyrics, but No one else has seen them so I don't know what other people's opinion on them is.

 

[LifeDepraved]

Haa. Looks like lyrics for an upcoming Korn song. ANGST!!!

 

[Midnightblueshade]

So left feeling inside of me

Lemme guess, that means you're a communist at heart? I don't mind how many fuck yous you are in your song, but you really ought to write lyrics in a language of which you have mastered the basics of grammar and vocabulary.

 

[delt]

> in a language of which you have mastered the basics of grammar

> «This is I»

well look who talk is

 

[The_Children_of_Decadence]

kewl anyway

 

[Midnightblueshade]

> in a language of which you have mastered the basics of grammar

> «This is I»

well look who talk is

Now I know what crediting your quotes is good for, keeps you out of the line of fire when your quotes are being critizied

I regard it as a valid sentence of a slightly different meaning compared to "this is me," since "I" is in this case a predicative noun to the "be" verb. Afaik PNs can be in subject case as well. But my German might be misleading me here, I'll take your word since you're a native speaker (whereas I and the lyricist [Lake of Tears's Daniel Brennare] aren't):

"This is a house" - is the house in subject or object case?

Anyway, "I" rhymes with "mountains high", which is an unusual - if not outrightly incorrect - word order, too. For the sake of rhyme and rhythm it's OK to be a bit lax about grammar in lyrics. However, "the same feeling as me" has the same rhythm as "the same feeling than me", plus it's grammatically correct - correct me if I'm wrong, you're the native speaker and I'll bow to your superior mastering of the language

Damn, my love of language got the better of me again. Weird, where simple "fuck you very much" lyrics can lead me

 

[juoppo]

heh.about that "song" i made it something like 10 mins because i waz pissed off in that time =D like some say it fucking sounds like korn

i'm pissed of too cause i usual have lot of lyrics on my comp but,fuck i format my comp and i just remember after doing that those fucking lyrics was on computer =D hell

 

[charnee]

like some say it fucking sounds like korn

yeah man!










..

 

[Mistro_pk]

Hey, its okay. Heres one of my song i made:

"I was once rocking-on top of the table,
Living Large, being able...
Took one wrong move worshipping a god,

NOW IM STUCK, DRINKING BLOOD YOW YEAH!

Ran across, the desert, YEAH!
Dark forces-imprisoning, the good side.
Couldn't, control, my humor,
of the end of man kind!

Battles across the nation,
Wars throughout the world!
Ending Hope, Life, Deception!
No more life for One,
(En-ti-ty!)

Ate, a few, hearts of good,
Coudn't resist, emotions of these fools!
Didnt know the reason, Yow
But apparently, i was human!

Battles across the nation, (ba ba papapa baaa!)
Wars throughout the world.(ba ba papapa duhhhh!)
Ending Hope, Life, Deception!(ba ba papapa baaa!)
No more life for One,

Solo

Now, im back to normal,
No more, madness YEAH!
End of Death and Misery,
And back, to the way of my God!"

Anyways, i like your style but lots of fucks

 

[dargormudshark]

 

[LazyGuitar]

It seems alot like a pre-Volume 3 Slipknot vs Children of Bodom mix of lyrics, its not totally shit, not amazingly creative, can't help thinking more thought would make it alot better. Not totally shit as I said though.

EDIT: Aimed at the threadstarter