Two things I keep coming back to to when I hear it are the hi-hat maybe not having enough sustain and might be tuned/eq'ed wrong and the lead needs a hammer-on in one spot instead of picking both notes (you'll probably be able to tell which one I'm talking about) but that I can go back and redo no prob. Anyway, if you guys could point out problems you hear I'd appreciate it. This is actually the 2nd time I've recorded the guitars all the way through, tried to hit the chords hard as fuck since it's so slow. I'm not really trying to emulate the original version, just trying to make it sound nice and punchy.
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/994726/Sleepwalkers - The Sexuality of Bereavement_2nd_draft.mp3
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/994726/Sleepwalkers - The Sexuality of Bereavement_2nd_draft.mp3