My First Try with Vox Mixing

[symphonicmind]

I re-wrote lyric to submit this song to a song lyric contest. This is a love story. When war happens, the man wants to be a soldier and join army. Although The women really wants to keep him but she knows who he is. The lyric describes the moments they said goodbye with the words, the feeling, the private thought, the hope..
Sorry for my bad at English.
Singer is my friend. She's not good very much at singing because she's studying 36 Chord Zither.
Please give me some comments. Thank you so much.

New version:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=749647&songID=7053652

Old Version:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=749647&songID=7052035

I dont know how to make the vocal sounds wetly in silent background like the first part in this song without feeling too roomy. How to solve that problem? Plz give me some advices. Thank you again.

 

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They sound too loud. I would try using a little reverb, and maybe a bit of delay.

 

[symphonicmind]

thanks for your advice!
I remixed it and now this is: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=749647&songID=7053652
Is it better or not?