Opinions on this short test clip Please!

[idontpullout]

Threw together about 30 sec, of a new song. Just wanting to hear some opinions on it so far. I feel I'm really struggling on the bass tone, and the palm muted guitar bits.

Thank You!

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/12652849/Output 1-2 TATE LECTO @.mp3

 

[Harley Barley]

sounds pretty good, cymbals sounded a bit strange at the end washy and the bass is a bit to clean/round i think

 

[ShamStalin]

Urm, the guitar sounds too thin I think, and try tighten up the bass Guitar, bring more tone, and cut some bass out of it. The overhead sounded quite fake, you should add some room for it, make it sound wider.

 

[idontpullout]

here's another version I messed around with...opinions?

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/12652849/song 2 ver 2.1.mp3