Some of my lyrics, opinions are appreciated. :)

Sjusovaren

Adrian Smith-wannabe
Apr 30, 2006
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Gates of Hell:

(Slow, acoustic intro)
I don't know how to get there , I don't know what I'll find there.
But all I know is that I have to try, to stop the end of the world.
(end of the intro)

/insert distorted riffing

Verse 1:

Somewhere beyond the distant sky, where evil spirits dwell on those who die
Lies an evil greater than all, time has come for that evil to fall.
Far away from the earthen sun, to a place where only darkness exists.
This is the destination of my final journey, the one that will surely end in my death.

Verse 2:

To every corner of the world, for the sake of the people of this earth.
I travelled long and far, always on my lonesome crusade my , personal war.
/insert small harmonyriff
Standing alone in this place, this cold deserted piece of land.
Feeling the adrenaline rush through my body, as I get ready for my final stand.

Chorus:

So far away from the people I love, the persons I will never see again.
As I make my final sacrifice, to save the people of this earth.
The gates of hell shall become my final battleground
The place where I will slay the beast!

(solo 1)

As the gates open with a fearful groan, the demons from within charge out to fight.
I fight for my life and swing my blade from right to left.
I feel like I'm fighting a losing battle, with death creeping in further and further.
He's soon here, to take me away with his bloody grasp.

Repeat Chorus

(solo 2)

(guitarharmony)

(slows down, back to acoustic)

As the neverending horde of demons suddenly die out, and the beast himself floats out.
What my eyes saw there is something I shall never forget.
That sight nearly drew me out of my mind, somehow I went berserk.
Plunging my blade into the devils heart, I feel a sudden burst of power tearing my flesh apart.
As I lay dying on the battlefield, I whisper my last words to the sky, and close my eyes.


Beauty of the Moment:

Have you ever noticed what wonders every second hold?
The glory around you, it’s worth more than gold
Feel nothing but the happiness, welling up inside you
When you feel like this, there’s nothing that you’d rather do

Chorus:

When you feel that this moment should last forever
When you want this second to never go away
You want to feel like this for the rest of your life
Feel all your anger melt away
That's when you truly feel the beauty of the moment

A rising sun, a rainbow or whatever you may prefer
Just enjoy it, and make damn sure
To appreciate every moment with your loved ones
Since you never know if they’ll live tomorrow

Repeat Chorus


Last one for now:

Untitled

Verse 1:

You go through your life, afraid of all that’s different. A victim of a fear that infects the human race. If someone says hello, you act like you do not see him. A pattern of cold behaviour that’s killing you inside.

Verse 2:

Why you act like this, no-one can explain. You view the world through bitter eyes of hate. Your wretched mind is damaged; your feelings are long gone. You are alone from now on, something’s got to change.

Chorus:

So open your heart and your mind, let them be rid of the fear. Get the rid of the fog in your brain, embrace love and see all things clear. The world is awaiting you, listen and answer its call. Everyone’s equal in it, this world was made for us all.

Verse 3:

If you could see the damage you do to yourself, maybe you would stop and think “is this the path I choose?”.
If you do not change your ways, just think of all the things that you would lose.

Repeat chorus.


I'd be really grateful if I could get some input. :)
 
Those are great Johan!! The first song especially had a very Bruce/Chemical Wedding feel to it I thought. Nice work, keep it up!! Will we be hearing music for them anytime soon?

Thanks Jenna. :)

Maybe, depends on if I get any more riffs out of my head (bascially, I play a note on the guitar and try to come up with a bassline, then build powerchords on that :D )