I've been meaning to post this for a while because I thought it was amusing. I was browsing the Metal Warriors website one day and found the page about Supremacy. This is part of what it says in the bio:
"SUPREMACY was first founded as WARPATH over a decade ago in a small garage in St. Albans. St. Albans and it's surroundings was then a breeding ground for Heavy Metal. It is somewhat of a Gothenburg (Sweden) in the Western Suburbs of Melbourne. You can check the details details of a number of bands and see that they are somewhat related to St. Albans from VANISHING POINT to MALADICTION and of course the biggest name in the world, AC/DC were established in the surrounding area's. St. Albans is where the legendary BON SCOTT went to school and where the band had there first gig. The foundation of METAL WARRIORS was also established in St. Albans. It's also now a Hollywood landmark where they filmed the movie "Queen Of The Damned." So much for being called the slums of the Western Suburbs of Melbourne."
Apart from the spelling and grammar, can anyone else tell me what's inherently wrong with that paragraph?
"SUPREMACY was first founded as WARPATH over a decade ago in a small garage in St. Albans. St. Albans and it's surroundings was then a breeding ground for Heavy Metal. It is somewhat of a Gothenburg (Sweden) in the Western Suburbs of Melbourne. You can check the details details of a number of bands and see that they are somewhat related to St. Albans from VANISHING POINT to MALADICTION and of course the biggest name in the world, AC/DC were established in the surrounding area's. St. Albans is where the legendary BON SCOTT went to school and where the band had there first gig. The foundation of METAL WARRIORS was also established in St. Albans. It's also now a Hollywood landmark where they filmed the movie "Queen Of The Damned." So much for being called the slums of the Western Suburbs of Melbourne."
Apart from the spelling and grammar, can anyone else tell me what's inherently wrong with that paragraph?
