What would you do to improve this mix?

[fps]

Or indeed what would you avoid doing that it seems I've done? This is a demo of a track that will be rerecorded for an EP
http://soundcloud.com/death-ape-disco/10-000-years-1
All opinions on all aspects welcome, it's a rock song

 

[jackbraglia]

the guitars sound like they're in another room. what happened there?