Thanks for the feedback!
I made some changes to this one. I tried another kick as Deadstar recommended, and then made a lot of eq changes to the bass to give it some life in the low end. I also took Salvation 13's advice and added some more beef to the lows of the snare, and also upped the levels of the reverb track to make things glue a bit more.
I'm thinking I may have overdone things a bit, but I'm pretty pleased with it. Let me know what you think.