Composition/Mix feedback for a new Project

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https://app.box.com/s/xypa10byryfx25f9y7zo

I'm working on a song for a new Deafheaven-esque/post-metal project, and I'm looking for feedback on this little snippet, from a composition and mixing standpoint. The guitars and bass are all DI, with LePou amp sims, and drums are SSD 4, all mastered with Izotope Ozone 5.

Cheers,
Prabhu

 

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UPDATED MIX: https://app.box.com/s/1z52wggjvb37o02w8r78

I think this version is much better, and would still love any criticism!