i need opinions on my song

Is it good or needs some work

  • AWSOME REALLY CREEPY

    Votes: 0 0.0%
  • eh ive heard better darker n scarier

    Votes: 1 100.0%

  • Total voters
    1
  • Poll closed .

DeathResort

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Jun 5, 2011
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its a song i wrote about a man you see in your dreams and its not freddy kreuger actually thats the song name too

you scream you cry but you dont wanna die
i chase we race cuz i wanna see you die
OH
yeah your scared to sleep at night to close your eyes
is a sin to your mind your bodys locked in fright
all the lights are off your hardly tucked in tight
you tell yourself it`ll only be a dream but that`ll change when you wake up in the night
you scream you cry but you dont wanna die
i chase we race cuz i wanna see you die
you search your room in terror yet your out of breath
in each corner stands a tall dark fellow bitch his name is death!
you scream you cry but you dont wanna die
i chase we race cuz i wanna see you die
running down the halls you scream for help yet your single in a home so lonely by yourself
congratulations you made it out the door but its only 4am c`mon back inside for more.