- Jun 14, 2008
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Hey,
I wrote this recently. I'm new to the whole lyrics thing so I'd really appreciate some tips! (Paul!!!)
Explanation:
"I take one step"
A man (the narrator) is walking towards the edge of a building, a bridge, or a cliff (... you get the point) in the final moments of his life.
"And weigh the odds"
He considers which is worse, to suffer more of life's hardships, or to have none yet never again feel the goodness of life.
"Follow my prints
As I am lost
Im lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy "
If written normally it would say, "I follow my footprints as I am lost within this tainted and foul soliloquy." It's a metaphor for life. His life is lost and life is the tainted soliloquy. A soliloquy is a monologue... or rather someone talking to themselves. So essentially, he is saying (metaphorically) that he is trapped within someones disturbed, mad uttering.
"Im sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness"
... pretty self explanatory.
"Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This wretched and
Fetid miasma "
Would read, "I'm sick of this vile that bubbles from this wretched and fetid miasma." Another metaphor for his life. A miasma is a dangerous, foreboding, or deathlike influence or atmosphere. The word is often used to describe pollution. The filth that bubbles from the miasma (as I've heard it used as a simile in a book I read: "patches" of evil that come from the miasma like bubbles in a swamp.) is the negativity and evilness of life.
"I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world"
He wants to be rid of all of the negativity. He wants to die essentially ("For departure").
"I take this step
My final step
For cessation"
Cessation is an ending or stopping. He takes his final step... off of the building. And ends.
It's the first lyric I've written in about 3 years.
Jake
I wrote this recently. I'm new to the whole lyrics thing so I'd really appreciate some tips! (Paul!!!)
Cessation
I take one step
And weigh the odds
Follow my prints
As I am lost
Im lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy
Im sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness
Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This wretched and
Fetid miasma
I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world
I take this step
My final step
For cessation
I take one step
And weigh the odds
Follow my prints
As I am lost
Im lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy
Im sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness
Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This wretched and
Fetid miasma
I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world
I take this step
My final step
For cessation
Explanation:
"I take one step"
A man (the narrator) is walking towards the edge of a building, a bridge, or a cliff (... you get the point) in the final moments of his life.
"And weigh the odds"
He considers which is worse, to suffer more of life's hardships, or to have none yet never again feel the goodness of life.
"Follow my prints
As I am lost
Im lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy "
If written normally it would say, "I follow my footprints as I am lost within this tainted and foul soliloquy." It's a metaphor for life. His life is lost and life is the tainted soliloquy. A soliloquy is a monologue... or rather someone talking to themselves. So essentially, he is saying (metaphorically) that he is trapped within someones disturbed, mad uttering.
"Im sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness"
... pretty self explanatory.
"Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This wretched and
Fetid miasma "
Would read, "I'm sick of this vile that bubbles from this wretched and fetid miasma." Another metaphor for his life. A miasma is a dangerous, foreboding, or deathlike influence or atmosphere. The word is often used to describe pollution. The filth that bubbles from the miasma (as I've heard it used as a simile in a book I read: "patches" of evil that come from the miasma like bubbles in a swamp.) is the negativity and evilness of life.
"I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world"
He wants to be rid of all of the negativity. He wants to die essentially ("For departure").
"I take this step
My final step
For cessation"
Cessation is an ending or stopping. He takes his final step... off of the building. And ends.
It's the first lyric I've written in about 3 years.
Jake