My Attempt at an Emmure type song

[xAfterTheBurial]

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10289754

I tried to write a really breakdowny type song cuz thats what im into right now, let me know what you think.


heres a new version of it, its still not perfect but I think its getting better...
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/22119678/Rip%20it%20to%20Shreds%20V2.wav

 

[Jan [MTW]]

0:21 --> WTF
Very untidy and out of tune. Might be something good for an emmure
type of song. But in this case... Not really.
The rest is ok.

 

[biffrov]

I think it sounded cool!
some stuff could be tighter..

Are you using DFH?

 

[xAfterTheBurial]

ya I'm using dfh with a replaced bass drum that im not completely happy with but it sounds alright in this mix i think. oh ya and joker that was just improvisation with my trem lol, its supposed to sound out of tune at least at that part and ya im kinda new to the floyd rose trem thing and its a pain keeping it in tune, but i probably should keep it more in check, and ya if i rerecord this it'll be alot tighter, this was just me getting my ideas down

 

[oroinvictus]

It's not bad. Drums are small and weak, but that's just DFH. Guitars need more volume, more gain and a lot more bass. It sounds like there's no bass track at all. A lot of the playing sounds pretty sloppy.

 

[xAfterTheBurial]

thanks for the comments, ill work on it!

 

[xmidihcx]

i like it!!! it has a very acacia strain feel to it too! and i like the harmonic minor vibe

 

[BugsyHewitt]

I really like it... I may record some vox over it if I may?

 

[darthjujuu]

the guitar sounds like you duplicated the rhythm tracks and tried hard panning them ... o_0

 

[xAfterTheBurial]

ya bugsy go for it that would be awesome, if you want ill even work on a tighter recording of it so that you have something better to scream/sing to, and ya i love harmonic minor! and minor 2nds but I think anyone who plays this stuff does. As the Rhythm tracks go i got lazy and didnt even duplicate them cuz this was to just get my ideas down.

 

[BugsyHewitt]

ya bugsy go for it that would be awesome, if you want ill even work on a tighter recording of it so that you have something better to scream/sing to, and ya i love harmonic minor! and minor 2nds but I think anyone who plays this stuff does. As the Rhythm tracks go i got lazy and didnt even duplicate them cuz this was to just get my ideas down.

Yea go for it. Just keep them in same session when u rerecord so we can just copy/paste vocal tracks over to v2