My Demo - After Forever (working version)

[innerdream]

Hi all

Would you mind taking a listen to one of my songs – After Forever – at my soundclick page at the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/util/streamM3U.m3u?ID=2143799&q=Hi

Your comments and views are most welcome on all areas (guitars, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc)

Cheers

Lyrics
Alone and contemplating the future that now lies ahead
The goddess will be waiting, to her beauty I am now led

Who am I? - I’ll sail across the sea of life
Where am I? - Searching for a place I could call home
Who am I? - Someone who believed so much
Where am I? - On my quest to free her forever

Fighting in glory for eternity
I’ll tell the story forever, forever

A thousand miles I’ve traveled, I’ve braved the fire wind and rain
The chapter still unwritten, the chance for glory still remains

Who am I? - I’ll sail across the sea of life
Where am I? - Searching for a place I could call home
Who am I? - Someone who believed so much
Where am I? - On my quest to free her forever

Fighting in glory for eternity
I’ll tell the story forever, forever

(©PFM 27/02/2005)

For other InnerDream songs, news, updates etc click on the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/innerdreammusic.htm

 

[AmirH]

I like your ideas but its quite sloppy. Keep at it though!

 

[innerdream]

thanks for taking a listen - for some reason I really struggled to get my arrangements tight for this song

 

[innerdream]

does anyone have anymore thoughts on the song?