My Demo - Distant Voice

[innerdream]

Hi everyone

Would you mind taking a listen to one of my songs – Distant Voice – at my soundclick page at the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/util/streamM3U.m3u?ID=2299056&q=Hi

Your comments and views are most welcome on all areas (guitars, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc)

Cheers

Lyrics
Once I would hear all the doubters in my mind
She saw the dream that I had deep inside
In this reality I saw the picture of my life

From the distant sun I heard your name

Where the truth lies beyond I could hear your distant voice as far as the sun
Where the truth lies beyond I can hear your distant voice as clear as the sun
As the truth lies beyond

I heard her calling from far away
The night is falling I found the way

From the distant sun I heard your name

Where the truth lies beyond I could hear your distant voice as far as the sun
Where the truth lies beyond I can hear your distant voice as clear as the sun
As the truth lies beyond

(©PFM 10/04/2005)

For other InnerDream songs, news, updates etc click on the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/innerdreammusic.htm

 

[innerdream]

does anyone have any thoughts on the song?

 

[Jeffy]

Well, the music is very maidenesque and very good but you might want to be a little more creative. It is a great metal song but nothing is very gripping about it. Maybe some of that is just because there's no drums so its hard to completely understand the direction of it. I like the mixing of the clean guitar with the heavy riff, stuff like that gives it some originality. The lyrics seem pretty solid to me. The vocals are the biggest problem, I'm not sure if you're planning to actually be a singer or if you're just covering it for the sake of the demo, but you seem to be kind of mumbling the words, needs a much more intense delivery I'd say. However, with that being said you're probably a better singer than I am so I don't have much room to talk. Your voice sounds like it would be a little better suited for backing vocals. All in all its a pretty cool song especially for a one man project.

 

[innerdream]

Thanks for the comments Jeffy - I might do a bit of backing vocals when the band is formed but I'm definately on the look out for a great singer

 

[Jeffy]

Thanks for the comments Jeffy - I might do a bit of backing vocals when the band is formed but I'm definately on the look out for a great singer

Yeah sounds like a good plan, I think you would be good as main guitarist and backing vocals.

 

[innerdream]

cheers Jeffy

 

[Nostalgiaplatz]

Hello Innerdream!

I'm listening to your mp3, very nice! I liked the voice in some parts, not on all parts though, it needs to mature a lot more. It looks like you're not pushing your voice and you're almost whispering instead of singing, but it might just be me. Overall the song is good, but as Jeffy said, without drums the song loses direction.

Here's a a software to program your drums: http://www.leafdigital.com/software/leafdrums/

Enjoy!

 

[innerdream]

cheers morningstar - thanks for the comments and the link!