Need some constructive criticism

[Line Level Recordings]

i have a little mix here
under a minute long

if someone could tell me what it lacks, that would be greatly appreciated

https://dl-web.getdropbox.com/get/Song Sample.wav?w=f884abcb


Sequencer: Reaper 3
Guitars: mesa/orange > sm57 > dbx 586 > firestudio project
Bass: bass > dbx 586
drums: kick snare triggered
overheads: crappy behringer overheads (under 100 bucks) > 586 >firestudio project

 

[Demonstealer]

Unable to download
getting a 403 error

 

[Line Level Recordings]

oh im sorry
gimmie a sec, ill post when its fixed.

 

[Line Level Recordings]

here it is

https://dl.getdropbox.com/u/2468228/Song Sample.mp3

sorry about that

 

[Demonstealer]

er..... you have just 1 guitar track in the center??? Play 2 full rhythm tracks at least and pan them hard right and hard left.

What all do you have running on this it sounds very messed up right now

 

[MF_Kitten]

yeah, agreed on that one. do two takes, pan one left and one right, and come back with the result. THEN we can hear what´s up

 

[slayercannibalsuffohead]

I have never heard a guitar tone quite like it, even though it is centred, its as hairy as dogs nuts.

 

[Demonstealer]

^^^^ I don't think all dogs have hairy nuts

 

[Line Level Recordings]

oh, well there is two takes and their both panned 80% left and right
does twenty percent make that much of a difference ?

let me try to touch it up, give me a min.

 

[Line Level Recordings]

ok
guitars are panned hard left and right on this one
and a touch louder

https://dl.getdropbox.com/u/2468228/Pdated SAmple.mp3

 

[Jarkko Mattheiszen]

IMHO the first problem here is that the clip is smashed to hell and back. Loads of clipping and pumping in there.

 

[Line Level Recordings]

sorry but, "IMHO"?
and i do have a limiter on there

i should put it back a notch?

 

[Demonstealer]

okay guitars sound MUCH MUCH wider now.

But yeah man everything is distorting really badly man. Pull down your master fader maybe?

What limiter is on the master track? what is the level if the master track.

There is some bad ass compression on this mix

 

[Demonstealer]

and IMHO is in my humble opinion

 

[Line Level Recordings]

oh ok sick
thanks for the heads up man!
your helpin alot!
im using a Finalplug 5 by wave arts

and the peaks on the master is hitting negitave 2

if that makes any sense lol

 

[Demonstealer]

just remove that limited. Lower the master volume so that its not clipping and mixdown and lets give that a listen

 

[Line Level Recordings]

ok gimmie a sec then

 

[Line Level Recordings]

https://dl.getdropbox.com/u/2468228/re edited.mp3

im still finding my guitars a little noisey

 

[Demonstealer]

how exactly have you recorded the guitars?

I think your source tone isnt upto the mark to begin with. Also there still is a shitload of compression on your stuff.

Care to uplink just the guitar file without any processing? Also maybe a drums comp and bass track of the same place.

I don't mind lining it up in nuendo and seeing what I can do and maybe give you some direction

 

[Line Level Recordings]

how exactly have you recorded the guitars?

I think your source tone isnt upto the mark to begin with. Also there still is a shitload of compression on your stuff.

Care to uplink just the guitar file without any processing? Also maybe a drums comp and bass track of the same place.

I don't mind lining it up in nuendo and seeing what I can do and maybe give you some direction

wow
thanks alot dude

i will get on that soon .. i just got home