opinions? tips to improve?

RattyFiend

bree blargh reeeeee
May 7, 2010
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short little clip. dumb riff and dumb shit at the end lol

but as far as production goes, what do you think?

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/6840224/fuckingdumb.mp3

ive been messing around trying to figure out exactly which sounds i wanna go with on my bands album. any tips on how i could improve the sound? or is this decent? :headbang:

btw, the riff in this is totally a joke i just threw down for the sake of this clip lol not my usual stuff.