We watched the bloodred horizon as the fire expatiated in a solemn approach.
Our skin melted like candlewax in arrays of crystalline fluorescence.
Our skin melted like candlewax in arrays of crystalline fluorescence.
So it begins...
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Dammit! I was hoping someone would take the ball and run with it. Oh well...back to the drawing board.
Black Dragon
Longest Here
luke
Messianic Subliminal Mind
a light touch, but enough to sear through breaking dawn and extingush another candle
would our diligence be for nothing? impending doom would bring us misery for a spell...be it not for men to decide
How'd I do?
would our diligence be for nothing? impending doom would bring us misery for a spell...be it not for men to decide
How'd I do?
Satori
Destructosaur
Death's embrace is cold and unwavering as the past and present converge to create the stillness of the moment that never ends and never begins.
HoserHellspawn
Pixel Manipulator
'Twas spoken of an undying desire, impossible to quench, but the yearning has faltered, unfed and broken. An uncharted course, an unspoken bond, an eternal sorrow, and an unmarked grave that revealed itself only to me mark the fire-scarred landscape. In rapturous comfort, those unable to comprehend melt into the terrain, buried in ashes, the blood flow an unholy spectre upon the ambient realms dying at my hand.
NOTE: I picked up on what you were trying to do last night but it was 4 am and my brain wasn't working so I decided to put it off for awhile, and well...
NOTE: I picked up on what you were trying to do last night but it was 4 am and my brain wasn't working so I decided to put it off for awhile, and well...
Hell Yes! Now we're getting somewhere. That's pretty good if this stuff just came out without too much thought.
The little thing I wrote took me a few hours. I actually broke out the dictionary to find the right words I wanted to use. Every now and then I'll come up with a word or phrase that I like and I'll write it down for future use. I have a hard time coming up with alot all at once.
Have a great weekend everyone!
The little thing I wrote took me a few hours. I actually broke out the dictionary to find the right words I wanted to use. Every now and then I'll come up with a word or phrase that I like and I'll write it down for future use. I have a hard time coming up with alot all at once.
Have a great weekend everyone!
HoserHellspawn
Pixel Manipulator
I'm posting this simply to keep this thread at the top of the list so people will continue on here.
I'd like to write something here but most of my "poetry" is never shared with other people , because my emotions , are MY emotions . To let other people know , My emotions , would be taking away from how I feel about them
benny
Artifact Of Chaos
benny
Artifact Of Chaos
This place sure does come alive when it's 2 am here. Well I must ZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzZZZZZZZZZ.
HoserHellspawn
Pixel Manipulator
OooOOoOOoohhh... that is good!
Awsome stuff, Johan.
Incidentally, I think the original point of this thread was to, between us, improvise a lengthy poem in the style of Opeth lyrics, each or us doing a couple sentences at a time or something. It could have been a fun little exercise.
Awsome stuff, Johan.
Incidentally, I think the original point of this thread was to, between us, improvise a lengthy poem in the style of Opeth lyrics, each or us doing a couple sentences at a time or something. It could have been a fun little exercise.
The problem with trying to write "opeth style" poetry is that usually it just looks like a bunch of fancy words put together without any meaning behind it.
What has been written earlier on this thread is good, but not many can actually maintain that, IMO. And if you throw 20 styles together in one... "too many cooks spoil the broth."
What has been written earlier on this thread is good, but not many can actually maintain that, IMO. And if you throw 20 styles together in one... "too many cooks spoil the broth."
HoserHellspawn
Pixel Manipulator
Well, you're right both in that (at least what I wrote) exactly was a bunch of words thrown together without any meaning behind it and in that throwing a bunch of differnet styles together usually doesn't work.
That'd be the challenge.
That'd be the challenge.
luke
Messianic Subliminal Mind
since seeing the post for the first time, it kind of grabbed me by the ass. but Johan and Protocol have valid points...
Not necessarily to copy Opeth, but just to do something in that vein. Maybe with a few guidelines, like the person who starts should hint at a point for conclusion or something (leaving the middle parts for people to fill out as they please) we could collectively come up with some pretty thought-inducing prose. Think of it as standing at the headwaters of a river... you know it eventually will get to the sea, but you don't know the journey it will make to get there.
I think it's a good idea and a possible creative outlet for some people who'd like to try their hands at expressing themselves.
So who wants to start?
Not necessarily to copy Opeth, but just to do something in that vein. Maybe with a few guidelines, like the person who starts should hint at a point for conclusion or something (leaving the middle parts for people to fill out as they please) we could collectively come up with some pretty thought-inducing prose. Think of it as standing at the headwaters of a river... you know it eventually will get to the sea, but you don't know the journey it will make to get there.
I think it's a good idea and a possible creative outlet for some people who'd like to try their hands at expressing themselves.
So who wants to start?
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