Some constructive criticism needed!!!! Song and mix tips?

[wyllie]

Hey dudes,


I've been working on a new mix and wanted to see what you folks think of it.
I'd love to hear any thoughts on the song writing as well as the production!


http://dl.dropbox.com/u/419166/Three Mortal Hours/Dark Stars2.mp3

Cheers guys,
-Wyllie