Vocal potential?

[VampiricYouth]

Well, my 95% Ambience EP has been pretty well received, so now I'm working on something more vocally orientated...I have no formal vocal training whatsover, but does this track have any potential in terms of vocal delivery? (What do you think of it overall? Is it enjoyable to listen to?) Do you have any tips on improving both clean and dirty vocal techniqes? Thanks a lot in advance!

As I close my eyes,
I draw my final breath.
Will we ever embrace,
On the wintry landscapes of Death?

A fire burns,
Deep inside my tired soul.
Worthless desires.
I will die alone.

http://www.streamload.com/Neverdead/Incomplete_Farewell.mp3

 

[affinityband]

The thing about it is i cant tell if that is a voice, as it is thickly distorted.
But you know i like it alot to be honest. but i reckon most people could do that given the circumstances.

 

[apostle]

sounds good

 

[VampiricYouth]

I wouldn't be surprized if most people could do it, it's a very simple tune, but I just had to get it down musically

Thanks a lot for the feedback, really appreciate it.

 

[Deliverance6]

not bad.....kind of catchy actually.....I would tone down the effects on the harsh vocals....just to give us a little bit of a chance to catch what your saying.......listen to it in the raw....without effects on it at all....then youll know how you sound.....better yet...post it in the raw....

cool shit though....wish I was a little more motivated to write.....haha....if I could I would post some of my old band......we were good....but Im just a PC idiot.....

 

[VampiricYouth]

Hmmm, here's something from my first EP...

A call of silence
Through grey fallen life.
A soul mate,
Not yet met.

Yet somehow hope lights melancholic days,
And the grey for a moment
Slowly
Fades
Away.

My personal favourite recording.

http://www.streamload.com/Neverdead/3.Soul_Mate.mp3