A game of poetry.....

[Satori]

Originally posted by Johan
I think it makes sense [referring to "Impermanence"]
Well written!

Thanks buddy! It's about something called the "law of impermanence" (from zen) which basically says that all things are in a constant state of change in the universe, and nothing lasts forever. Change is the only constant. It touches on the invalidity of dualism in showing that opposing forces aren't mutually exclusive, but rather co-dependent on one another for their existence and therefore ultimately the same thing (like 2 sides of a coin). It stems from the idea of einstein's relativity (which oddly is also prevalent in ancient zen philosophy as well), that is, things exist only in relation to and are defined entirely by their counterpart (ie. without darkness there'd be no light, without sadness there'd be no happiness, and vice-versa) What I was going for there is that by seeing through the seeming duality of opposing phenomenon the sense of duality is broken and the impermanent self is realized as the timeless self of the entire universe and everything in it back to the point of the beginning of the universe which was (as far as we know) the ultimate singularity which divided and divided until we have all the things we see today. This is just all speculative crap, completely subjective, and just an interpretation. Blah blah blah, ok, I'll shutup now, hheheh

Satori

 

[Xtokalon]

ouch satori that was nice:

"My lover like a petal smooth
Myself as if the petal's dew
Between the rains I will sooth
As I become one with you. "

I'm not your girl friend, hehe, but god damn, I can swoon at those lines.


I should give up my postmodernist pretenses and aspire to write sacharine style poetry too!

Raven777:

"together apart, throat on my heart"

*X contemplates in silence, because he know its meaning too well*

 

[Johan]

That's okay Satori, you may yak away all you want

So, I could share some of my love poems too... but I won't, instead I digged up one of my personal favourites (among what I have written). You may find: 1 band name, 1 album name, 1 song name in there, but it's all coincidental.

"Dismal Euphony"

My eyes have cried a million tears,
Seemingly drowned as darkness sears.
I prayed forgiveness in the night.
Benighted I've been, lost without light.

Now, In darkest hour of despair,
A dance of shadows, night-time fair,
I watch bewildered - thoughts forlorn.
Spirits wail to me; I do mourn.

Mourn at their coming, alas, in vain.
Their thoughts drown me; I, sombrelain,
Look up to meet their hollow eyes,
Pray: "Take me home - my body dies."

Willing hand I offer them, and
Turn my eyes towards unseen land.
While shadows fly as guides to me,
Playing a dismal euphony.

 

[Satori]

Wow, thanks for the nice comments! I didn't think stuff written in the spirit of zen/physics/existentialism would go over too well, and I'm happy you guys get what I'm trying to convey. So here's another, my personal favourite cuz it has the most meaning to me in a spiritual sense, which is also self-titled and serves as a definition of my handle, hehe



***Satori***

Ice crystals forming
Radiance swarming
Docile morning
Embraces your soul

Seclusion shatter
In silent clatter
Time, thought, and matter
Unite in the whole.

 

[Satori]

Originally posted by Johan
"Dismal Euphony"

very nice, would you like to explain it?

Satori

 

[Duvall]

I'm in a writing mood, so here's the next poem.

weeps, peace, throat, last, seperate
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thrice he weeps
all dismal hatred
anger
rage filtering
into a coalescent
vapour, forced back
down my throat
to be cried out
yet again

bare neck
praying for
respite
for peace
bound hands
clutching
the other

brought together
to seperate
sensation
experience
thought, though
desire remains
to feel
and bleed
the last
merciful
touch

---------


next 5 words - copy, loosen, breeze, shudder, reach

keep 'em coming!

 

[Xtokalon]

copy, loosen, breeze, shudder, reach

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I kept my vows on a
scented promissory note.
I sent it off in a breeze.
Wafting high in the sky
making love to passions,
the sunset beaming
through the text
I copied long ago.
The past has reached me
in a recurrence I thought
I never deserved,
I shuddered
for this time I have,
I loosened my worries
for your sake
and let sincerity set sail.


word: trust, former, instincts, noblest, flowers.

 

[Lakestream]

trust, former, instincts, noblest, flowers


The lily thought of former thoughts
and thought of what might be
She turned her head from side to side
and saw what flowers see

She did not want to talk to them,
the lesser of the green
Her instincts told not to trust,
for she was the queen

She just sat there, sad, and thought,
for many lonely hours
A cruel faith she had bestowed upon herself,
this "noblest of the flowers"


new words: pure, blue, meadow, cry, crown

 

[Demonspell]

Dark Silent Place - an attempt at writing like Akerfeldt

Severance for the innocent pawns
Gathered around the overturned tables
Of a dynasty in its twilight years
Sons of tyrants carve their legacies
In the stones on which the wretched walk
And we offer our displaced kin a gift of veils
Where the crown of virtue once held reign.

Overlooking the meadows where we once held feast
All I can see is a dark silent place where nothing grows

Migrating north towards the promised lands
Foul breath of lingering failure upon their tongues
Drawn towards limbo, or a home never familiar
They crawl like serpents starved with poison
And the translucent blue sky mocks them from above
And nobody dare to help the pitiless wanderers
Decayed bodies in a state of pure damnation
Superstitious cries held close to their souls

In the shadow of a shrine where the oracle bells once rang
All I can see is a dark silent place visited by no one


next five words:

forest
faith
nowhere
insanity
disguise

 

[HoserHellspawn]

forest, faith, nowhere, insanity, disguise
-----------------------------------------------------

an unending circle drawn closed once again
on an another misfortunate night
teetering on the brink of insanity
once again taken to a new height

on a rock in a forest I ponder my fate
neither more insightful nor wise
attempting to keep faith in my sole cause
pushing me further benieth my disguise

I brush myself off and head back home
I've told the forest all I wish to share
leaving my only true sense of place
and returning to a world of nowhere

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the next five words:
passage, key, moonlit, strength, earth

 

[Johan]

Wow, now we're getting a nice bunch of poets in here!
So, how many are seriously influenced by Opeth in their poetry?
I admit that I wrote a poem called Forest of October, and some similar to that.

Originally posted by Satori


very nice, would you like to explain it?

Satori

"Dismal Euphony" is about being lost and without faith, eventually finding comfort in the beauty of darkness, sort of. Everyone's free to interpret it their own way

 

[Mikael is God]

passage, key, moonlit, strength, earth

The passage to my secret place
The vagina.. the clitorus awaits
You need a key to open the door
The inside is moonlit
'tis a small passage for a whore
You may have trekked the earth
From the south pole to the north
But you'll never find the strength....................................................................................................................................................................to open up the metal underwear leading to my filthy vagina that has been ravaged and eaten and fingered so many times but yet it's still tight

next 5 words --- Penis, Nipple, Jerk, Whipped Cream, Mail man

 

[Xtokalon]

Penis, Nipple, Jerk, Whipped Cream, Mail man

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Stars and circular orbs and objects
etched on an ancient tree,
a penis tatooed with a historicity.
The mailman sent out wedding invitations
to people who'll never get married.
The spirit of humanity doused in such symbols
vague calligraphy I lost in dreams
Bliss jerked away like a kiss stolen in a public hall
You are: sad and drowning in a sea of whipped cream
I rescue you, purse my lips upon your nipple
and lick you clean because I care.


words: righteous, motions, nauseous, oceans, yours.

 

[Satori]

Originally posted by Johan
"Dismal Euphony" is about being lost and without faith, eventually finding comfort in the beauty of darkness

cool... I totally relate

 

[Opet]

Originally posted by Mikael is God next 5 words --- Penis, Nipple, Jerk, Whipped Cream, Mail man

OK! No comment on that...just thoughts. (sexual frustration!)

I hope it's OK that I remark on a few, but don't actually take part. Satori...Meld. I loved it. Flowers work well in poetry to begin with, but with just a few of the right words, it's even more beautiful. Xtokalon has added a few fine poems himself. If I had to pick a favorite as of right now, I liked the one that included "I loosened my worries..." I know that was only right towards the end, but that's just that lasting impression I like so much. The entire poem itself seemed selfless, and in today’s world, that’s becoming a rare quality. To Lakestream, I have to take back what I said about not preferring the more rhyming poems. The "Noblest of the flowers..." line is one of my favorites so far. The twist of a flower feeling doomed. Heh! Duvall's "broken, more lyrical style" is good IMO. I know you think it's bad, but not me. I think more honest thoughts come from people whose minds are...preoccupied. You get those scattered thoughts all coming out at once. It seems to have more significance...feels more real. TO ME anyway. "I've told the forest all I wish to share..." That was cool, Hoser. Reminds me of “Bearing her pain in the wilderness.” a favorite of mine. I’ve always especially liked the woods. You could understand then how well Opeth’s lyrics went over with me.

Lynn

 

[Duvall]

Thanks for the compliment Lynne/Opet, there's plenty more where those came from!

righteous, motions, nauseous, oceans, yours

---------------
lurching ahead
frigid, gnarled
fingers clutching
crushing
blackening my shoulders and throat

convulsive motions
gasping
grasping
for purchase
in the eroded safety of the shore

oceans away
from mindfulness
from reason
but stranded
not as alone as I'd like to be

these wounds
severed cords
are yours
tides of nausea
wax and wane ceaselessly

agony
and distance
fail to achieve
heroism, righteousness
ebony waves lapping at my livid body

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Sorry guys, it's been a bad week.
X, congrats on making something out of some pretty difficult words! That was a tall order.

Next 5 words: noose, canine, pearl, coast, blade

do I sense some kind of nautical trend?

 

[MetalManCPA]

Next 5 words: noose, canine, pearl, coast, blade

I wonder what she's thinking
With clouds so dark above
Dreams of neck and noose?
Or the knowledge of ones love?

Her mind is torn asunder
And she feels isolated and alone
I frantically search for a meaning
Like a canine digging for a bone

I gather pearls of wisdom
From people who offer support
But it seems so hopelessly futile
For no progress I can report

So we coast from day to day
With decisions that must be made
Does the future have a life
Or does the life have a blade?


Next 5 words: fantasy, jealous, zealous, ballistic, creation

 

[Duvall]

We've hit another lag.. so I'll try to keep things aflame.
Great poems so far, everyone!

fantasy, jealous, zealous, ballistic, creation

plunging into
lush fantasy
careening
suspended
chain'd wrists
gnash'd teeth

lusting
for a touch
a zealot
of sensation
creation
desire
desire, denied

I cannot
make you
feel
need or be
jealous
for the ballistic
nature of my thrashings
my begging
pleading
for

you
vendor of
insincerity
destruction
unrequited
desire
denied.

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Give you one guess what's the source of my troubles..

next 5 words: control, mirrored, vicious, maudlin, aflame

I know you've all got it in you!

 

[Xtokalon]

Duval, *itches head* it's gotta be a girl, right? right?

control, mirrored, vicious, maudlin, aflame

----------------------------

I had convicitons sliced up
in a red garden of viscious thorns
and roses stained with sorrow,
and blood,
where i saw smiles and glitter
sparkle distances that encumbered
the temperance and temper I sought
to control for the sake of my decency.
I'm not inhuman I reminded myself,
I am mirrored imperfection, maudlin flaws
that'll never transcend its boundaries,
heroic ideals that never quite change,
steadfast frailities that never quite change,
asymetrical illusions and longings,
softer hopes that soothe me,
and truths that burn my health aflame.
I had my heart sliced up that day,
an existential field of self-righteous thorns
and red Summer roses stained with
the blood I recognized as my own.
I produced this blood
into which I drowned, the ruby silence
from which I despaired as an adult
quietly, quietly and alone
in the utter silence I have forgotten,
companioned only by the sheen of stars
and that fragrance I have taken care to remember.


words: Intensity, repose, circles, resistance, tommorow

keep this thread alive everyone!

 

[Xtokalon]

The world turns with lovers
and those who wish to become more than one.
O for the want of love, for feelings bubbling over
for the graces of a tender caress, truest companion.
We abhor solitude, have scoffed at its acrid taste
For love we risk everything, but all for heartache.......



"Man courts Deb, the case of unrequited love at first site."



:deb: (walking on the beach)

(whoa!!! ooo my god, I'm not even sexually attracted to her but she makes me feel alive again!)

:deb: (now lying on her beach blanket, calmly sitting, various laughter, various positions)

(whoa, I'm in love, I never felt so good about life in a while, o thank you Lord! I will go and make my acquaintance and she will be mine, heh, heh, heh)