Bath / LYBM liner notes puzzle: The current state of the game

[InfinityPotato]

Also maybe rearranging the words in each line may be of use for a coherent sentence. Though it deviates from what vague instructions we have available.
Consider:

Breathe, See Creation in you
In Voiceless Sleep I speak
The Clear Thoughts Shivering
So great The Humbled Life

I'm really thinking Jason Byron just screwed these numbers up in the first place though! lol

I think this is the closest we got, and it makes sense!

 

[InfinityPotato]

So turns out that the dwnwlkr solution is the correct one, all lines are correct since Toby himself confirmed it. So... it means the puzzle got solved.