byebye writers block

[dreaming neon darkspot]

so yeah ... anyone wanna do me a huge favor and read this story i just finished after bitching about it last night? i'll love you foreverrrr...

http://storywrite.com/story/69719

 

[Will Bozarth]

shut up, Laura Red Dragon

 

[Karmic]

why don't you ask your(everyones) bitch


(will)

 

[El Stormo]

Hmmmm... the middle part, where the main character heads down the hallway, pursued by Lina, is very confusing, but you probably intended for it to be, and the ending, while certainly surprising, is a bit light for the tension you built up. I had expected his secret to be more morbid, so it's a nice twist, although I'm wondering if it isn't a bit of an anti-climax.