deathcore mastering practise anyone?

[marios.blythe]

hello guys! i'm not so good at mastering and i uploaded my latest work for you to test out your mastering skills!
here is the mixed track at wav 24 bit
http://www27.zippyshare.com/v/uDkIVTjI/file.html

and here you can listen to my version:

 

[Raul Oliveira]

Here's My Try

 

[Phil_ocean]

Hey guys, this is my version
http://dl.dropbox.com/s/wntn57znts1qsvz/Children of Another God - Master.wav?dl=0

 

[Trollhouse]

Hello,

my first post here on the forum. Here´s my mastered version of the song- let´s see how you like it!

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