i have a problem...

[sexualist death]

i have a fucking start of nice lyrics and now i am stuck...
i cant continue to write it and i cant leave this lyrics like this..
i think this one have a lot of potential...

what should i do???

 

[Taliesin]

Hmmm... leave it like that, take a walk, or only take a "creative pause"
Continue when inspiration has come again
Dont worry, it will...

 

[sexualist death]

but its continuous already 1 month
and the lyrics is very philosophical and i just dont have few words because i know what i try to say in the lyrics, everything is in my head...

 

[Taliesin]

Wanna send me a PM or mail and have my counsel...?

 

[sexualist death]

maybe i can put it here?

 

[Taliesin]

 

[sexualist death]

i would have run to you like from a sweet dream,
and all the storys and the legend you tell me about love and the world
there is there many people that dream on love, and all the story
that you tell me, what the name of moral intelligence?
lie down small girl, your body relaxed
lie down small girl, your hair spread
lie down minute
lie down princess, you are all rotten and soft yearning to touch
i was want to die yesterday in my dream
i wait and wait and this is hurt, i was want to touch you
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i feel that is so sucks now

 

[Taliesin]

Wrote ya a PM

 

[chileanmetal]

the other thing you could do is put write some words that you think it ight fit in what you're wriing. Then, try to make sentences with this words, and then fix them. It works for me.

 

[Mischievous]

You can try to look for news inspirations....and be patient...it will come...

 

[sexualist death]

i would have run to you like from a sweet dream,
and all the storys and the legend you tell me about love and the world
there is there many people that dream on love, and all the story
that you tell me, what the name of moral intelligence?

lie down small girl, your body relaxed
lie down small girl, your hair spread
lie down minute
lie down princess, you are all rotten and soft yearning to touch

i was want to die yesterday in my dream,
i wait and wait and this is hurt, i was wanted to touch you
and Under a clad of the world`s skies i scream
the dead awken and breathing the glow of my eternal death
the angels are screaming, waiting for my death as well
eyes are toring the skies with expectations to my dark death
the satan is no longer as threatning as god
inocence missleading eye trickingwith falls on and on
a neverending vast abyss exhausting me
and dooms day brings along a reviving death darkness

lie down small girl, your body relaxed
lie down small girl, your hair spread
lie down minute
lie down princess, you are all rotten and soft yearning to touch
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how this is look now?

 

[xenophobe]

Are you going to sing it in english? Or is this a translation?

 

[sexualist death]

in English but i will fix what i need and the song will be perfect
(i hope)

 

[mourningstar]

http://www.deadlounge.com/poetry/tips.html

i've always thought that this site is hilarity at its best. read the tips, then click on the links below...

no offence meant, of course

 

[Jax]

Val's here too! yay!

 

[Rusty]

Originally posted by mourningstar
http://www.deadlounge.com/poetry/tips.html

i've always thought that this site is hilarity at its best. read the tips, then click on the links below...

no offence meant, of course

Is it sad that this site inspired me to write something??

 

[Rusty]

@sexualist death: This is advice I got when I got stuck writing music: it won't come if you force it. Take a break from doing it for a few weeks and it will return. Or read some different lyrics/poems, they don't have to be in the same style or about the same subject, just expose yourself to different types of lyrics/poems and it will often give you additional inspiration.

Failing that, find an unknown poet and rip him off.

 

[mourningstar]

Originally posted by rustymetal
Is it sad that this site inspired me to write something??

if with "write something" you mean fill randomly the gaps in order to create your "original" gothic poem (plus choose the fitting image), yes, it is sad

 

[Rusty]

Originally posted by mourningstar
if with "write something" you mean fill randomly the gaps in order to create your "original" gothic poem (plus choose the fitting image), yes, it is sad

No, I meant write something original.

 

[mourningstar]

oh, well... i gave you the wrong link, then...

val