just finished making my latest metal song,need cirticism and opinions \m/

[GobyGuitar]

hello every one , i want to share my latest work ,its a metal song everything is composed and done by me ,and i want opinions on wht it needs to get to the point of something that you would actully want to share and say that this is really good stuff

here is the download link ,listen to it and tell me abt the mistakes and at what part are thay (the vocals are not done yet sry abt that ,i just made a little part of them in a rush to test how it would sound like )

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/FQ6kRnNg/Wind_Of_longing.html

 

[GobyGuitar]

http://www.4shared.com/mp3/J_U3SwYw/Winds_Of_longing.html
sry,thts the right link

 

[GobyGuitar]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uMb0JhY8rag&feature=youtu.be