RAW: Real amps, drums, bass, vox, no click

Ease up on the compression and in-your-face sound, add quite a bit more ambience, make some large-q changes (check the mids/low mids on the snare and vocal and add highs to the snare) and I think everyone will agree your mix is far better.
 
I'm really, really enjoying the original.
Sounds raw and garage-y, and sometimes for certain bands there's absolutely nothing wrong with that.