What's wrong with this mix ? (need help please) :)

[Stillborn]

So, any advice, or criticism is welcome...

There are things that are off... But somehow I can't really put my finger on them.

Here's the mix.

(btw, yes, it is a cover of Madonna)

 

[Element77]

Hmmmm... I'm stumped. I really like the guitar tone, its abrasive but not "over-brittle". I would say though, I really can't hear the kick, it gets buried. Maybe up it allitte. And the overheads, needs some roomy-ness, I heard the room in the snare, but i hear really no cymbals, so i think that might be throwning my ears off. But for where it's at now, i think this is a really good starting point. Some overall beefy-ness i think is needed. And I like the vocals. ...and Maddona? Who the hell covers that? ha!

 

[Stillborn]

Is that an improvement ?

 

[Stillborn]

Help ?