Working on some new progressive metal!

[Backe]

Hey y'all. I was in the mood for creating something a bit more elaborate, musicwise. I wrote this a couple of weeks ago, but I haven't had the guts to really ask someone for opinions since I was fairly uncertain of whether it's good enough or just too different compared to my previous work. A lot of people on here know in which direction bands are moving with their music these days and probably won't flame me for not playing two-step death metal/metalcore anymore.



Please tell me what you think!

 

[Plankis]

I'll start of with saying that that tom fill is absolutely terrible haha. Needs to be a lot more interesting in my opinion if it absolutely has to be there. Maybe try the snare for those first hits?
Have you tried removing that little pause around 1:16-1.17? At the moment that part feels like: verse -> bridge -> bridge -> Chorus. That rest makes the upcoming riff sounding a little out of place.
At 2:24 the rhythm guitars are far too loud. I don't think they are the primary instrument in that section, so turn em down. I'd also consider adding a few more ambient guitars for extra ambience.

Mixwise I'd add slightly more gain to the guitars and worked on adding a little more depth to the mix.

The song has some cool parts but it's hard to follow the red thread throughout the song.

 

[Backe]

haha, thought the tom fill was epic! the result of me going nuts playing the drums on my midi keyboard. got a really nice production idea for it though, this sort of chaos feel with sampled background voices and guitar feedback and stuff.
WIP i guess would be the acronym of choice here. got loads to write and production elements to be added etc.
guess another thing i strive for is to write everything completely without rules or musical/lyrical boundaries (apart from proper language, grammar and such). i think that will really show when the vocals are added later on. haven't got a preamp atm, not even a DI box, so everything is just line level and digitally boosted gain. every no no in the book, haha.
really appreciate the input though, "cool parts" was mainly what i wanted to hear since it isn't anything but scattered parts atm. gonna work hard on tiing it together. just wanted to hear something remotely positive so i don't abandon this project too, haha.

 

[DanLights]

I like the structure, and pretty much everything. Drums might be a bit too loud in the mix, but not distracting either IMO.