Anyone interested in some of my lyrics?

Here are some of my lyrics :) I have no idea, how to write music, can't play an instrument, but still I love metal. The following lyrics are all written by myself. The group Ancient Fiends doesn't exist, it's just an idea for a metal group. I think my lyrics, are lacking somehow the rhytmus. That's why I show them of here, to get some opinions.
I work on the second "album" :) The following is my first album concept. I also do covers, but because here it's about lyrics, I dont post it.



ALBUMNAME: PROPHECY OF THE BEAST



IT's AWAKE

When the stars are beginning to fade,
Clouds of mist are rushing trough the woods,
When the crows pick at the dead,
Than it comes awake!

First there is only the breath of death,
Followed by the screams of victims,
When the blood is dripping,
When all becomes a mess!

It’s awake and it’s near,
It’s raging and it’ the burning death of your fear.
AWAKE, AWAKE, your life is at stake!

Hunting through the darkest hour,
With every drop of blood it gains so much power.
It’s awake, AWAKE AWAKE, Your life is at stake.

AWAKE AWAKE, It’s awake.




NIGHT OF EVIL

Darkness is falling without a sound,
The moon is lighting the sky,
Winds are calling of mercy,
And only death is around.

Night of Evil,
Devil comes, Demon rise.
Night of Evil,
Death stalks, Hearts stop,
Night of Evil,
It’s pushing you over the top.

The breath of evil is winding you down,
It’s behind every thought,
It’s inside you and outside is waiting more,
It’s the Night of Evil,
Death comes to the town.

Night of Evil,
Devil comes, Demon rise.
Night of Evil,
Death stalks, Hearts stop,
Night of Evil,
It’s pushing you over the top.

Silence first, than all is nevermore,
I saw in the eye of yours,
I felt your fear,
I became your tormentor!

Because it was the…

Night of Evil,
Devil comes, Demon rise.
Night of Evil,
Death stalks, Hearts stop,
Night of Evil,
It’s pushing you over the top

Die, cry and scream,
No, this is not only an evil dream,
Face the truth, its every time the night of evil.

Night of Evil,
Devil comes, Demon rise.
Night of Evil,
Death stalks, Hearts stop,
Night of Evil,
It’s pushing you over the top!



COMING OF A NIGHTMARE

You! YES, You! You feel it right now!
You! YES, You! You scream right now!
You! YES, You! Your die right now!

But as you see, as you awake,
You realize, it was nothing but a fake,
It was the first warning,
Of something, that’s out there,
When the nightmare is dawning!


It’s the coming of the darkness,
That surrounds your soul,
It’s the waking of your fear,
That makes your shiver,
It’s the coming of a nightmare,
That makes you to confess.

You! YES, You! You feel it right now!
You! YES, You! You scream right now!
You! YES, You! Your die right now!

Do you fear the flow of blood?
Take the last exit,
Get ready to die,
Scream, if you wanna stop!

But as you see, as you awake,
You realize, it was nothing but a fake,
It was the first warning,
Of something, that’s out there,
When the nightmare is dawning!

You lay awake in your bed,
You hear the noise in your head,
You think of something, that’s quite dead,
But with the coming a nightmare,
It will awake,
It comes; it hunts, with burning desire.

It’s the coming of the darkness,
That surrounds your soul,
It’s the waking of your fear,
That makes your shiver,
It’s the coming of a nightmare,
That makes you to confess.



YOUR SOUL BELONGS TO ME

There is something in my head,
It's like a splinter itching,
It comes at night,
It's the beckoning voice of destruction,
It stays when the day begins,
It makes you wish to drop dead.

Voices, Voices of the Dead,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It whispers,
Voices, Voices of the Fallen,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It commands,
Voices, Voices of the Damned,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It calls
Voices, Voices are in my head.

When I enter the school,
I see them everywhere,
The souls of the damned!

YOUR SOUL BELONGS TO ME,
It screams,
In my head, as I draw the gun,
As I put it at my head,
To make it stop,
But I'm too weak it seams.

Voices, Voices of the Dead,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It whispers,
Voices, Voices of the Fallen,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It commands,
Voices, Voices of the Damned,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It calls
Voices, Voices are in my head.

YOUR SOUL BELONGS TO ME,
It beckons,
As I sit in the darkness,
Alone with my tears,
But I only want to be free.

I ran out into the madness of nowhere,
Hunted by the voices,
Followed by whispers:
Your soul belongs to me.
Why is it everywhere?
Why I can't be free?

Voices, Voices of the Dead,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It whispers,
Voices, Voices of the Fallen,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It commands,
Voices, Voices of the Damned,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It calls
Voices, Voices are in my head.

Finaly it appears right before,
Madness in it's highest level,
Voices are twisters of deadly wishes,
As I shot me in the head,
In the second I'm dead,
But now I know, it was all lie die,
It just wanted me to die,
Because I was free,
Freedom is more than just a live,
It's about to survive.
Now I'm out there, soe beware!

Voices, Voices of the Dead,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It whispers,
Voices, Voices of the Fallen,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It commands,
Voices, Voices of the Damned,
Your Soul belongs to me,
It calls
Voices, Voices are in my head.

Voices, I say VOICES,
Come here, I want to talk to you,
Voices, Voices,
Begging you...


DEVILS CHILD

He was born on a rainy day,
When the death was stalking the streets,
As the thunder and lighting came,
Dirty roads are fading into his past,
But we beging the story of his life,
With his first single day,
The start of his endless try to survive.

Some say he had never a chance,
But he would answer ist all a dirty lie,
On this rainy day in May,
It was the beginning of worlds decay.
The first act of a deadly dance.

He was the Devils Child,
He was the furor of mankind!
He came to rule the world,
he lead all into madness,
He was the Devils Child,
His world of destruction is shining bright!

His first deadly sin,
A deadly wish that came true.
It was not his fault, it was just fate,
The death of his enemy from the school
But now it's all too late.

Than came his youth,
Deadly rage for all in his way,
Blood on the floor, on his hands,
All his answers were only death,
He believed only is the denying of the truth.

He was the Devils Child,
He was the furor of mankind!
He came to rule the world,
he lead all into madness,
He was the Devils Child,
His world of destruction is shining bright!

He's still in this world,
And he says, beware of me,
He now understands,
That life is precious,
And not about making others in ghosts of the death.

But he cant stop here,
It's not that easy,
He has a prophecy to fullfill,
It's all so clear!

He was the Devils Child,
He was the furor of mankind!
He came to rule the world,
he lead all into madness,
He was the Devils Child,
His world of destruction is shining bright!

Remember my words!
He was the Devils Child,
Prey for his fallen soul!
He was the furor of mankind!
And he forever will!
He came to rule the world,
In darkness he's the king!
He lead all into madness,
Our World is falling apart!

He was the Devils Child,
His world of destruction is shining bright!


DEMON HUNTERS

When the night is darkening your heart,
The silence is taken your breath,
The sanity is falling apart,
They are out there, bringing only death!

Demon Hunters,
They are ready to die for the cause,
Legends about creatures from the pit,
Demon Hunters,
They hunt you down,
Their history is forgotten,
Only the hate reamains!

In the days, as the kingdom broke into chaos,
As Demons walked the land,
Fury reigned the hearts of the believers,
The call for hunters was so strong,
Their destiny was at hand.

Demon Hunters, Legends of the dead,
They hunt the Demons nevermore,
Only the memory of the ancient times,
The freedom is gone, that chance is spent!

Demon Hunters,
They are ready to die for the cause,
Legends about creatures from the pit,
Demon Hunters,
They hunt you down,
Their history is forgotten,
Only the hat reamains!

War is rage and insanity,
Demon Hunters, proud to strike the weakest,
Their ideals are gone,
Forgotten the idea of their companionship.
They lost their reality.

Demon Hunters,
First the men of protection,
Demon Hunters,
Are now the synonym of destruction!

Destruction,
Hunters,
War,
Demon,
All is nevermore...


EYE OF THE BEAST

It was a lonely stormy night,
Birds fled from the weird sounds,
That were raising up into infinity,
Followed by screams,
The start of a deadly fight.

They were alone in darkness,
As the devils eye opened right behind them,
Next time they looked back,
It was ready to attack,
The hall of the beast was becoming a dirty mess.

They saw in,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They were watched by,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They had no chance, because,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
Was tracking them down.

It slept there for centuries, ready to awake,
Legends about it, so many and dark tales,
They knew it all, but the whisper of gold and power,
Lurked them into that hall of death,
And soon, the old bann was ready to break.

They are running, screaming, falling, down into the deadly hell,
The Eye is right behind them, following without haste,
They are wasted now and forever,
All they hear is that deadly bell.

They saw in,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They were watched by,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They had no chance, because,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
Was tracking them down.

Now they are falling down in that magic bloody well,
The Eye is closing them, bringing them hell and fire,
The Beast begins to gnaw on their nasty minds,
It dwells there, down in the hall above hell.

They saw in,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They were watched by,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
They had no chance, because,
THE EYE OF THE BEAST,
Was tracking them down.

The EYE OF THE BEAST,
Was tracking them down,
-down, and down,
until they drown,
in THE EYE OF THE BEAST

Yes, they drown,
in THE EYE OF THE BEAST!


CALL OF THE DEMONS

Night is falling down, blessing us with darkness,
As the strange voices begin to rise,
Hours of darkest rites are starting,
Demonic chants are filling the air.

It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate,
It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
And it's half past to late!

Sometimes you hear them scream,
Shivers are running down your neck,
As those evil words begin to shatter your head,
It's all out of your weirdest dream.

It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate,
It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
And it's half past to late!

The Cult is strong and the prophecy fortold,
It's the Evil that drives the world,
Every second blood is draining from their souls,
Evil things, are ready to unfold.

It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate,
It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
And it's half past to late!

They now walk the land, as dirty shadows first,
They come with every latin word of evil,
They are the avatars of the undead, the gods of hate and fear,
And they have that bloody thirst.

It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate,
It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
And it's half past to late!

Half past to late...
Fate, Fate is coming,
When they are doing that dancing and singing,
Cults of the past and the future, because:

It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate,
It's the CALL OF THE DEMONS,
And it's half past to late!

Half past to late,
Demons, Devils, Wraith, all will rise,
Power, Reign, War and Hate!
And it's half past to late!


PROPHECY OF THE BEAST

Legends are written in blood,
They tell the story about the darkest hours of mankind,
Fortold is the destiny of the world
It's a dreadful story,
About secrets never told.

Some found the stonecarvings, as the rain was drowning the country,
Others tried to understand the cryptic writings, but always failed,
If they had only known about that bounty,
But fate is the deadly angel of the unknown,
And now it's time to get paid.

The Prophecy of the beast, is nothing but eternity,
It's the unknown secret of the past,
Now the prophecy is ready to be fullfilled,
The strange come out at last.

Prophecy of the beast,
Deadly poison from the east,
Demons dancing in fires of the dying phonix,
Somwhere we hear the dooms bell.
Prophecy of the beast.

The first stone was broken,
What followed was chaos and destruction,
The prophecy of the beast,
A final deadly token!

It's the eternaly lie of the centuries,
Awaken is the beast,
Bloody turn the rivers,
The evil is ready for the final feast!

Prophecy of the beast,
Deadly poison from the east,
Demons dancing in fires of the dying phoenix,
Somwhere we hear the dooms bell.
Prophecy of the beast.

The beast is coming, to make an end of our dreams,
Hope is written in crubling runes,
The apocalyps is not anymore looming,
The final war of rage is turning,
Our world to hell,
All, is burning,
Because we forgot the prophecy,
Prophecy of the beast.

Prophecy of the beast,
Deadly poison from the east,
Demons dancing in fires of the dying phoenix,
Somwhere we hear the dooms bell.
Prophecy of the beast.

All, is burning,
Because we forgot the prophecy,
Prophecy of the beast.


IMMORTAL

It was such a precious child,
They all had forseen the little boy a great future,
But the world is full of deadly intersections,
Where the life is threatened by death and deadly wishes,
For this lonely soul, the fate was only torture.

He was the leader of the forgotten men,
He became the saviour of thousand,
Just to die, in front of a demon,
Who came to take him to his destiny,
His time of turning was at hand.

He became, what the ghost never will be,
He got the power of eternity,
He is the god of the forlorn souls,
His prayers are stretching into infinity.

IMMORTAL, His soul for the dead,
IMMORTAL, Lost but not gone,
IMMORTAL, Knowing the unknown,
IMMORTAL, Keeper of secrets,
IMMORTAL, His time is at hand.

As the world was changing and turning to darker times,
He came again, fighting the dreaded demons,
The souls of people long forgotten,
They fought on his side against the army of the Rotten,
It came the age of raging war and fights!

But he is the Immortal!

IMMORTAL, His soul for the dead,
IMMORTAL, Lost but not gone,
IMMORTAL, Knowing the unknown,
IMMORTAL, Keeper of secrets,
IMMORTAL, His time is at hand.

His time is at hand...
Enough evil on this world is spend!


INSANITY (Bonus)

When death is calling you to me,
You can see that you weren't free,
As you stand before my eyes,
You understand all your dirty lies!

Is it you?
Is it me?
Or is it just insanity?

You drove through your live like a lunatic,
You did things we haven't to speak of,
You were the angel of destruction,
Your life was full of confusion.

Is it you?
Is it me?
Or is it just insanity?

You are here in hell to understand your life,
I can talk with you forever about cutting others with the knife,
Of truth you never wanted to hear,
And now you hope, you just disappear!

Is it you?
Is it me?
Or is it just insanity?

Killing others with a smile was easy,
Earning money with the gun, driving you crazy.
Fists hitting the lips of your opponents,
And nobody understands!

Is it you?
Is it me?
Or is it just insanity?

Insanity is just what you wanted to be,
Enslaving others with your killing spree!
They wanted just to lead their lonely lives,
But you cut their silk of life with your destructionary knife!

Is it you?
Is it me?
Or is it just insanity?

You scream, that it called you every time,
You heard the wildest fantasy in the bells chime.
I say yes it's true and it's right,
But some people are able to fight for the better kind!

Is it you?
YEAH, you are well done for!
Is it me?
Not what you believe, I'm not the devil,
Or is it just insanity,
No, its all a deadly fantasy!

Insanity, Insanity, Insanity!

Is it you?
YEAH, you are well done for!
Is it me?
Not what you believe, I'm not the devil,
Or is it just insanity,
No, its all a deadly fantasy!

INSANITY, INSANITY... Calling for insanity...
 
I think there is potential, but the songs seem to be typical of the metal genre... death, demons, devils, everything evil, beasts, and such... I dunno. I don't write all that good either, u can see here www.freewebs.com/nocturnalsun but I don't pay attention to lyrics that much (which is why I'm still Catholic and a Christian, even though I listen to heavy things like Children of Bodom, Dimmu Borgir, and In Flames).
 
Very interesting! Yeah, it's too metal typish, what I wrote, but I have other lyrics too, that I worte to pictures (gfx-art) I made. But I see, that your's have more concept, maybe I need to rewrite mine, or at least make it better, when I write new ones. Anyway thx for your honest critique and also for the link to your lyrics, very interesting :)
 
ooooh deviantart... I've heard of it, I bet the pics are pretty good. I'll check em out tonight, but i g2g to skool right now haha anyway thanks man, I might add lyrics later, but I'm not that great at singing. :( But at least you're the only one who didn't tell me after hearing it "Dude where's the fuckin electric?" :) I recorded all that when my electric was in the shop bcuz acoustic songs are really nice
 
Well I listen to a wide range of music, and yepp, accustic is very nice! I take the liberty and try to make you a pic for your name of the "band" NocturnalSun. Hope it will be good. When I have finsihed it, I will post the link here :) Also if you need Wallpapers or Coverart, just say a word, it's one of my hobbies and as long as I get credits for it, it's ok with me :)
 
I'm not really satisfied, but here you can see what i came up with:

Nocturnal_Sun.jpg



For Details look at:
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/2976751/

But maybe I will try another one laters.
 
:OMG: :D:D:D:D:D
WHOAH

I've never doubted Deviant Art as a whole, because I love checkin out graphics sites and looking them over. I save the images most of the time, if they're real good, and use em as desktops depending on my mood.
Very VERY VERY nice. If that was something ur not really thrilled with or impressed by, o man I would love to see what you actually are really proud of. ^_^ You know... my band is very slowly getting together, and we might actually stick with the name Nocturnal Sun. If we do, that'd be cool if you could work out the cover art for us for our cd or cds!

ROCK ON