lyrics you wrote

[Travisty]

Maybe some of you would like to post some of your lyrics and we can tell you what we think. or if you need some help writing songs, i'm sure I can help.

and if this is already a thread point me to it and i'll say twelve hail mary's and sleep with the preecher's daughter

 

[K-z-H]

here are some lyrics i wrote jsut one random night...

Death Night

I stalk the night,
Wreaking havoc,
Wherever you are I’ll find you.

Hunting you down,
Ripping you up,
I’ll leave you faceless,
A bloody fuckin’ mess.

Chorus:
My body forsaken and my soul shattered,
I live on half-dead, utterly blackened.
To take your life and cause you pain,
I use your terror for my gain.

An angel dies in the night,
Stabbed through the heart,
Life bleeds away.
I’ve made my trip,
By battle’s done,
Now to you I fall Eternal One.

 

[Zivilyn]

Kill Kill Kill
Die Die Die
Blood is cool
I'm so metal



No, but really, I don't want to post my lyrics out of fear that someone will see them and steal them, otherwise I would love to.

 

[Zivilyn]

But what I'll actually do is throw out some lyrics I made when I was 12 years old, just for the fuck of it, and because I recently typed them up. No fear of stealing because I hate them, and everyone else should too.

Standing Stone

Standing there like stone
Make your presence known
Rise from the ashes
Your spirit's grown
and the panic's shown
Do it for the masses

Have you ever felt this way even for today

Can't see in your soul
There's a gaping hole
In Society
Back to the days of old
When your freedom's not sold
Everything's rightly

the human race put to disgrace

Just like standing stone
The air of life blows past you as you crumble down
Back to the days of old
Can't do anything
Lifeless standing stone

something crying out
Inside it shouts
Calling to your mind
Crimson flood
Red with blood
Coming to your eye

It won't be here much longer if someone just realizes it

He comes from our own
Restores order
No longer stone
Time is getting shorter

ROCKIN 12 YEAR OLD

 

[Travisty]

I don't know about you but I don't think anyone could get low enough to steal lyrics off the internet, because it is so unmetal

Propaganda for the soul

for what it's worth i am not dead
dreaming of you is what i dread
your asylum of phobia
silent scream of propaganda

(chorus)why won't you look into me
are you afraid of what you'll see
why won't these waters clense my soul
my faith forever unwhole

I drink for you your syonide
I am your plan of genocide
I break from you the decieved whore
propaganda of anchient lore
(solo)
(chorus)

for what it's worth i am not dead
dreaming of you is what i dread
your asylum of phobia
silent scream of propaganda.

see no fear

 

[sonofhendrix13]

here are some lyrics i wrote jsut one random night...

Death Night

I stalk the night,
Wreaking havoc,
Wherever you are I’ll find you.

Hunting you down,
Ripping you up,
I’ll leave you faceless,
A bloody fuckin’ mess.

Chorus:
My body forsaken and my soul shattered,
I live on half-dead, utterly blackened.
To take your life and cause you pain,
I use your terror for my gain.

An angel dies in the night,
Stabbed through the heart,
Life bleeds away.
I’ve made my trip,
By battle’s done,
Now to you I fall Eternal One.

Wow, these lyrics really suck balls. They're not creative in any way and they have no real meaning. Maybe if you had some writing talent you could make this theme work but its cliche no matter what you do with it.

 

[Travisty]

I don't know they kind of sound like alice cooper meets britany spears

 

[K-z-H]

I don't know they kind of sound like alice cooper meets britany spears

lol, how'd you figure that?

 

[ProjectedBlack]

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[D-KOM]

This song is called "Night of the metal maniacs", it is a song dedicated to the 80ies. Unfortunately I don´t remember the whole lyrics...

Alcohol in veins, time to hit the road, beer and bottles of Jacks by side
Tonight it´s metal night, getting drunk alright, banging heads and shacking ground
Flame of Metal burns arise with spike and thorns, get the train if you´re not like us
Weared in filthy leather, breath is stinking hell ya´, we don´t care cause we all drunk tonight!

Kicked in the ass by the long haired mass, don´t mess with ´em just confess your music taste

Loud and fast thats all we need, in the name of Metal you´ll bleed
No time for sober thats for sure, whsikey beer and Metal is our lure

 

[Travisty]

those are not so good
those are like metallica meets nine year old

 

[Vital Remains]

This song is called "Night of the metal maniacs", it is a song dedicated to the 80ies. Unfortunately I don´t remember the whole lyrics...

Alcohol in veins, time to hit the road, beer and bottles of Jacks by side
Tonight it´s metal night, getting drunk alright, banging heads and shacking ground
Flame of Metal burns arise with spike and thorns, get the train if you´re not like us
Weared in filthy leather, breath is stinking hell ya´, we don´t care cause we all drunk tonight!

Kicked in the ass by the long haired mass, don´t mess with ´em just confess your music taste

Loud and fast thats all we need, in the name of Metal you´ll bleed
No time for sober thats for sure, whsikey beer and Metal is our lure

Get the train? Bottles of jacks? What the hell. Please explain the train thing i dont get it. Why would you mention your breath in a metal song? You must have been wasted when you wrote this....

 

[D-KOM]

Get the train means that you should get the train out of the city when you are "not like us" or you get beaten the shit out of you.
Have you ever puked after drinking too much beer (or Jacks = Jack Daniels) and than continued the drinking? This is why I mention the breath.

Like I said, it´s a dedication to the 80ies, not meant serious and with no higher philosophical meaning! It´s totally basic and straight to the point. The only goal was to catch a little of this sex, drugs and rock´n roll thing atmosphere. ;-)

 

[Travisty]

instead ov "get the train" shouldn't it be "catch the train"?

and to make better lyrics try to make them more clear of what youre trying to say

sex drugs and rock and roll? it sounds like happy hour at the local pub

 

[D-KOM]

Show some sense of humor, even if it´s not your taste. I think he lyrics couldn´t be easier to understand, they are total clear but may thats only my opinion cause I wrote it. See it as a form of artistical freedom

 

[Travisty]

i'm just saying that some ov the lines sound unfinished, like a nine year old wrote it, hense my analogy.

 

[OfManAndMetal]

those are not so good
those are like metallica meets nine year old

watch it!

 

[Travisty]

what i'm saying is it has some good stuff (metallica) and has some bad stuff (nine year old)

i got nothin against metallica.

 

[OfManAndMetal]

ok, we forgive you

 

[sonofhendrix13]

I think 90% of metal lyrics suck. Half the bands today just write about death and killing constantly with no attempt at originality. Its quite funny actually.