Need opinions on my song

[RodneyMunch]

I'm writing this song for this girl I like and I need some opinions on it. I'm an idiot when it comes in instruments, but I got the lyrics figured out... I think. Heres what I got so far.



I was out in the cemetery just digging up another old body until I found you...

I love the way you rot
It makes you look so god damn hot

That beautiful body
Brutalized into an undead hotty
Always want to caress that corpse
Till your bones and flesh start to warp

I can't get enough of the way you reek
It'll give me an erection that will last a week

Your skin... Tearing off...
Your hair... Slipping off...
It all... Gets me off...

Loving the way you rot
How every thing is falling off
Its all so god damn hot
Can't help but beat it off

The maggots crawling out of your mouth
Your guts spilled onto your blouse

Those bloated breasts
Latched on to that bloodied chest
Like some kind of sacred crest
Perfect place for my head to rest


So do you guys think she will like it?

 

[fps]

hahahahahahahahahaha.

fucking. amazing.

 

[RodneyMunch]

Thanks. Anyone else want to give your opinion? Seriously, just saying anything would help.

 

[roofrider]

she will love it buddy! add some extras bout cuming or shutting heroin into the eye ball and ye will be sorted

 

[RodneyMunch]

Alright thanks. I've been a bit brain dead lately so I haven't really had the chance to work on it.