oppinions desired

[Danny7468]

Hi everybody, sometimes I just write some stuff down that comes sponteous into my mind and today I thought I might aswell share it to get some oppinions (suffering from a splitting headache since yesterday, due to a pinched nerve in my neck, it got better after I saw the Chiropractic but shit it still hurts...- just to explain the circumstances haha)

Lost
Crawling on the floor
Begging for more
Lost in the confusion of my mind
Condemned to be blind

Time is running out
Nothing I found, nothing I found

Searching for something that
Gives me the power to fight the evil within
Swallowed my pride, no hope inside, no hope inside

Damnation is taking it’s course
No peace somebody help me please
Lost in the endless depths of agony
Can anybody set me free?

Lost for all times sentenced to endure torture
Where is the world that once taught me justice and order

Crawling on the floor
Begging for more
Lost in the confusion of my mind
Condemned to be blind

Time is running out
Nothing I found, nothing I found

… Time ran out

 

[RagingRazer]

Waw, this is pretty good!!! It's obviously influenced by Evergrey, but it's more than OK!!! Keep up the good work. You should show this to one of the masters...
Greetz
RagingRazer

 

[Danny7468]

..thanks Raging razor I appreciate it and yeah just started writing down stuff last year I thought maybe some time it could be usefull....;o))
Greetings to Ghent had some colleagues over there at the last job I have worked

 

[Danny7468]

..another one:

Our world is spinning around
upside-down
misconceptions of perfection
selling a dream
to work the big machine

Green is the color that rules
...still not believing we are fools

Our heads filled with desire
artificial dreams will take us higher

Caught in the spiders web
all manipulations in our head
distrust our senses
make believe of a manufactured truth,
disguising the evil lie

No questions asked, insanity rules
.. yet, still not believing we are fools

Our destiny is sold, but still convinced we are bold

No courage displayed
our voices are silent

Abused until we're tired
Dismissed -
The next generation rises under their fist

... still our world is spinning around
'til the last one is worn down

Danny

 

[the feeder]

those poems are realy good. thats what i call real poetry. the words that you use are very good.

 

[Danny7468]

..thank you "the feeder" each comment is greatly appreciated I just felt comfortable enough to post them on this board. Again thanks a lot (that is a huge compliment considering I am german hihi trying to built up my vocabulary in that area)

 

[RagingRazer]

Ghent greetz you back!!!
The other lyric is also very good!! I really like you're work!!! I also write some poetry, but mostly in Dutch, but sometimes in English.
I must say, for a German (no offence!!) you're English is very good.
I'll post some of my work in a pm
GREETZ
RazingRazer

 

[Danny7468]

Ghent greetz you back!!!
The other lyric is also very good!! I really like you're work!!! I also write some poetry, but mostly in Dutch, but sometimes in English.
I must say, for a German (no offence!!) you're English is very good.
I'll post some of my work in a pm
GREETZ
RazingRazer

thanks, can't wait to read yours

 

[RagingRazer]

I just read read the second one again (I'm becoming a big fan of yours!!). I was wondering. Is this song about the powerful America ? I think it would be a wonderful protestsong. Correct me if I'm wrong, but 'green is the color that rules', that has to be about the dollar...
I'll say it again, I love this song!!!
Greetz
RagingRazer

 

[Danny7468]

I just read read the second one again (I'm becoming a big fan of yours!!). I was wondering. Is this song about the powerful America ? I think it would be a wonderful protestsong. Correct me if I'm wrong, but 'green is the color that rules', that has to be about the dollar...
I'll say it again, I love this song!!!
Greetz
RagingRazer

... well it is supposed to be a methaper for money yeah you right and it could apply unfortunately to a lot nations and people... are you up now, because I would love to chat about your artwork too... just loving it

 

[RagingRazer]

Hi
unfortunately, I'm not able tochat trough IRC, but we can just talk here about the 'artwork' like you call it. I'll PM you other alternatives
Greetz
RagingRazer