Well this is hard because i don't know exactly whats wrong with it. The bass could be a bit punchier in my mind, like maybe boost a tad at 100Hz and duck almost a huge bit of the mids (this is where your guitars should be) then boost about 1khz to get those clanks haha. i think the master is missing a bit too,
EQ>Limit>multi Comp (simply master tool)
Some eqing sounds like what you need cause it's very mid rangy so maybe boosting the highs and lows there will too (BUT NOT SUB FREQUENCIES)
I really enjoy the song though, the guitar tones good, but i'd boost a bit of the highs here but try not to get the nasty distortion sound
I didn't even think about putting that. Lol, I forgot to put that! But I always boost at 100hz about 1-3db. I try to get a holy marriage haha, then i compress it. Depends on what kick. Sample I use and how I eq it.
I finally got to listen closely and the main thing I think needs work is the vocals need to be brought forward. The reverb is too much and makes them sound far away.