- Jun 14, 2008
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Hey,
I wrote this lyric today and I'd like some feedback on it. What do you think?
My voice sounds a bit like Jonas' btw.
Jake
I wrote this lyric today and I'd like some feedback on it. What do you think?
Cessation
I take one step
And weigh the odds
Follow my prints
As I am lost
I’m lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy
I’m sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness
Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This retched and
Fetid miasma
I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world
I take this step
My final step
For cessation
I take one step
And weigh the odds
Follow my prints
As I am lost
I’m lost within
This tainted, foul
Soliloquy
I’m sick of this
Of this madness,
And loneliness
Sick of this vile,
That bubbles from
This retched and
Fetid miasma
I long for closure
For departure
From this twisted
And dismal world
I take this step
My final step
For cessation
My voice sounds a bit like Jonas' btw.
Jake