Right, these are two sets of lyrics I'm using for my band, written by myself. The first was written nearly a full year back, the second I finished about an hour ago 
I've only ever written two other sets of lyrics, one of which was just poor and the other a touch sensitive for me. Please take this into account and understand that these are by no means gems, just a kid's first attempts at lyric-writing. The first batch was severely inspired by that great band Gehennah and will not be changed. I wouldn't mind any feedback on the second one, though, any thoughts or constructive critiscism or anything.
Both songs are unnamed. Both are based on real experiences, the first is a true story 
1.
I went to a party only just the other night
Necking back those beers so I would feel alright
I been busted by the law and making the news
So I needed some alcohol to drown my blues
I pissed on myself and got mud all on the floor
But then I saw this babe who made me come back for more
She was dressed real loose, looking like a hussy
And from then I knew that I needed some pussy!
You don't know me too well, babe
But I know I can have your night made
I ain't got a car
Ain't got the right clothes
I ain't got the drugs
That others take in droves
But I got metal in my music and metal in my heart
And my sole desire is to let the fucking start!
I woke up this morning and couldn't feel my head
I hoped she gave it to me in more ways than one instead
Where's this fucking girl that I know I gotta lay?
The other bitches here could turn a straight man gay
Fuck you in your cunt or fuck you up the ass
You're so goddamn hot I know I couldn't let it pass
So watch out babe when I'm coming up your street tonight
You'd better take off all your clothes and let me fuck you right!
2.
"This is for all the pseudo-fascists teachers in the world, including our good friend Big Johnny H!"
One mistake thirty years ago
Left a bitter old man feeling low
He rules the kids with an iron fist
Denies them the freedom that he missed
Once upon a time my hair wasn't an issue
Now things don't seem to work like they used to
They look in their rulebook and tell me I'm wrong
It's only that book that makes them feel strong
Even my mum don't make me tie it back
Less of the attitude, cut me some slack!
Their authority is assumed, an illusion
Tear off their mask and push it right through them
Mortal men with the power of Jesus
Bit only he had the strength to lead us
Don't dictate to me how my life must be lead
Don't make it a struggle just to earn my bread
You're only human like me and my friends
Don't push things too far, who knows where it'll end?
A bit more work on the second one to try and get things across. Like I said, only finished an hour ago! Speak! Speak!
I've only ever written two other sets of lyrics, one of which was just poor and the other a touch sensitive for me. Please take this into account and understand that these are by no means gems, just a kid's first attempts at lyric-writing. The first batch was severely inspired by that great band Gehennah and will not be changed. I wouldn't mind any feedback on the second one, though, any thoughts or constructive critiscism or anything.Both songs are unnamed. Both are based on real experiences, the first is a true story
1.
I went to a party only just the other night
Necking back those beers so I would feel alright
I been busted by the law and making the news
So I needed some alcohol to drown my blues
I pissed on myself and got mud all on the floor
But then I saw this babe who made me come back for more
She was dressed real loose, looking like a hussy
And from then I knew that I needed some pussy!
You don't know me too well, babe
But I know I can have your night made
I ain't got a car
Ain't got the right clothes
I ain't got the drugs
That others take in droves
But I got metal in my music and metal in my heart
And my sole desire is to let the fucking start!
I woke up this morning and couldn't feel my head
I hoped she gave it to me in more ways than one instead
Where's this fucking girl that I know I gotta lay?
The other bitches here could turn a straight man gay
Fuck you in your cunt or fuck you up the ass
You're so goddamn hot I know I couldn't let it pass
So watch out babe when I'm coming up your street tonight
You'd better take off all your clothes and let me fuck you right!
2.
"This is for all the pseudo-fascists teachers in the world, including our good friend Big Johnny H!"
One mistake thirty years ago
Left a bitter old man feeling low
He rules the kids with an iron fist
Denies them the freedom that he missed
Once upon a time my hair wasn't an issue
Now things don't seem to work like they used to
They look in their rulebook and tell me I'm wrong
It's only that book that makes them feel strong
Even my mum don't make me tie it back
Less of the attitude, cut me some slack!
Their authority is assumed, an illusion
Tear off their mask and push it right through them
Mortal men with the power of Jesus
Bit only he had the strength to lead us
Don't dictate to me how my life must be lead
Don't make it a struggle just to earn my bread
You're only human like me and my friends
Don't push things too far, who knows where it'll end?
A bit more work on the second one to try and get things across. Like I said, only finished an hour ago!
Speak! Speak!
